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......it is an intersting storyplot but there are alot of typos.(Misspelling and typs are a bit of a pet peeve; no judgement) Plus the rankings after Colonel is Brigadeer General, then Fuhrer, much appreciated. Please note this is not a flame but veery constructive criticism.

OOOOO SO GOOOOOOOD! WRITE MORE SOON! I CANT WAIT TO SEE MUSTANG AND EDWARD ACTION! ::bites in hankerchief:: >.<

Please contine!

That was so funny with Roy getting punched! The only difference between him and Miroku is Miroku gets slapped, Roy gets punched. LOL!

That was the BEST FMA story I\'ve ever read!!!!!!! I did like how you had Ed have a go at more than one gender to. It appeals to all of the senses. I think you should have Ed have sex with Russell again and have Roy catch them, and then they all have a threesome. That would be cool.
Update soon!

I\'m so glad you updated this story and so fast. Keep it up and update when you can.

I want the Roy and Ed smexy goodness! XD Anyways good chapter, I am not much of a guy/girl thing but I guess it was well written. Sorry I am so much with the guy/guy action. XD BUt I still love this story. Well I cannot wait for the Roy and Ed flirty goodness! Keep them coming. ^^

I\'m actually commenting on all of this story at once, since I didn\'t want to stop in between chapters. ^_^ I really enjoyed the whole story, and it\'s nice to see a Roy/Ed plot where they don\'t immediately jump into bed together. I prefer your style, having them build up the tension for awhile. I also like how you\'ve portrayed both Ed and Roy, as you\'ve given a lot of thought to each of them. All in all, I really love this story and can\'t wait to see more!

If you\'re still looking for a beta, I can help for a couple of weeks or however long you need. I have WordPerfect for Windows, so I don\'t know if that would be a problem if you have another word processor.

ok the story is getting drawn out to much i want some love.... lol it great so far but if ya keep it up without some lovin i might start to cry lol :P

Yeah, more chapters.
Actually, I think you have Hughes pretty well figured out. I agree that while he wouldn\'t actually hurt HURT Roy, I do think he might give him a pounding. He\'s not above slapping him around for his own good ( think EP. 25). I also go with the interruptation that Hughes goes from goofy to serious in a heartbeat. That\'s his way. He pretends to be a screwball. It makes people less on guard when they are being chatty around him.
I\'m looking forward to more.
Have you pimped this on LJ yet?