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I love it, please update soon! I hope russel comes out more, I think he was pretty cool!
Can\'t wait till ur next update, hope it\'s soon

(^_^)

I agree with BWinner. a beta will help tremedously with your spelling and grammar, as will a program with spellcheck, such as MS Word. I am also a not-so-busy beta, so I\'d be more than happy to help you with this story, along with any others you\'re doing at the moment.

otherwise, this is a great story. keep up the good work!

The ranks go: Major -> Lieutenant Colonel -> Colonel -> Brigadier General -> Major General -> Lieutenant General -> General -> Fuhrer

So, General is about as high as you can get without being the Fuhrer himself, and Brigadier General is only one rank above Colonel.

The title of the fic made me read this and it was worth of reading!

Your first try at yaoi-fics? Good luck with that! I know how you feel
when I wrote my first yaoi-fic. In fact, the same happened to me
with Omi Tsukiyono from Weiss Kreuz. =3 (I\'feel like writing a FMA
yaoi myself soon.)

So far so good. You\'re doing great job with this! I love how
Edward\'s being a bit of a \"slut\" and such a flirt with Russell
(whoever he is... I haven\'t seen him yet). Look out for the
green-eyed monster! XD (Hey, wait a min. *I* got green
eyes! o_o Eep!) Anyway, keep on writing this fic! Don\'t give up!

To Saya thank you soo much for helping me with the chain of command thing..I feel silly now, lol, but I went back and corrected it thank you again so much for your help, much huggles and smiles Mija...:-)

Well, your grammar needs a bit of work my friend...You have many missing apostrophes and such that you may want to fix up... Perhaps find yourself a good BETA, that\'s a good first step. Other than that I LOVE where you are taking this! It is hillaious, and I can\'t wait to see how you get Roy and Ed to hook up!

PS. If you don\'t want to kill me for the BETA suggestion, I am one and would be more than happy to help you. all you have to do is e-mail me and we can set things up.

Update soon! Please!

Update update! I like it alot. I like how you made the older Ed. ^^ So hot can\'t wait for the smex! the smex!!!!!

Pretty good :3
However, there are definetly some descrepancies since you haven\'t seen the entire series..I won\'t spoil anything at all, but you may want to revise a bit once you see it all :3

Also, if you cried at episode 25...be prepared for the last 11 episodes or so. :P

For the things I can say without spoiling horribly..(Be aware though)
1) Winry/Ed probably wouldn\'t work. They are way too close to being siblings...XD
2) Ed loses his watch forever at one point (Won\'t say how heh)
3) Ed also leaves the military before the series is over, around episode 42 I think (Can\'t remember exactly)

I won\'t say anything more buuut, see the rest and then take a look at this again :3