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o.O.... Holy shit, that was just hot all around! I-- just, wow. ::laughs:: That's really all I can say at the moment. ^^ :) (:

I think you have a really good way with words. The one thing I would advise is to take your time a little more. Developed the tension a bit and then release it. What you did was by no means bad, but a little more would have been delicious. Great Job!

BRAVO,BRAVO,i loved but it was a tad short and don't you think after her orgasm she would be mad because she could get pregnet

ED=^_^

WINRY=>_<

ha ha hah, i love it. keep it up!

Oooo, pro\'s and con\'s, huh?? Hmm.

Well, I usually turn tail and run from a lemon if the \"C\" word is used to describe a woman. to me, that\'s one of the most distasteful words. I\'ve also noticed that a lot of stories pay attention to the main errogenous zones, (breasts, groin) but don\'t say anything about other sensative areas, like the inner elbow, the ears, the palms of the hands.

Hmm. ^^;;

i like a bit of comedy, but not like laugh out loud comedy. i also like it when people take it slowly not tear off the others clothes in a race to see who can get nide first. i think that just a little too fast paced it makes the seen last lnonger if you take things a step at a time.

YOU WILL WRITE MORE FMA WITH WINRY/ED OR AS MY MANE SAYS, I WILL FREAKIN\' EAT YOU! I liked it. More?

Oh yeah... Turn offs: Yaoi...(sorry people), and the cliche sex talk
Turns ons: A bit of nibblin\' on either side and dominant women. NOT DOMINATRIXES!!!!! But women who like to take the lead...ya know?


Thomas Alex C.

get their kink on eh? I don\'t know if this is playing off an idea or not but I have a damn good doujin where they get it going in an alley in the middle of the day in central against a wall, I don\'t know why but the against the wall thing is damn hot. And I mean anywhere. But attention and description of some of the body parts, breasts, vagina, penis, are usually really good. Like saying that he was playing with a nipple and how it hardened. Or getting descriptive with noises, like the sound of their bodies as they met again and again with a smacking sound from their two sweaty bodies. Nice desriptions like that. I feel like a perv now but I do know what I like =^^= Oh and something really fun I\'ve seen in like 2 hentai games but never read and was a bit hot was this bit of foreplay where a guy actualy rubs his penis against her clit and vagina but doesn\'t go in, she has to be really wet but I heard it\'s stimulating as hell. I have limited patience for foreplay so sorry i don\'t know for sure. Anyway there\'s a few ideas, enjoy.

this was fun! and i understand what you mean, when it comes to writing sexual topics.. i actually think you\'re doing a wonderful job so keep it up, and what about that theater, eh?