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Uber good and bon yes yes.

Well...you have skill. You really have it. But I have to tell this: the begining was rather nice...until Vegeta banged Gohan\'s head into the wall and started doing that strange thing to Gohan\'s mouth. But later it got bad, not too bad, but bad enough. Even for PWP it\'s...dunno... A horny Vegeta molesting a teenager.

You try to be daring, insolent and scandalizing with those things with Bulma\'s pregnancy and Vegeta\'s repulsion to her and Vegeta\'s harshness toward Gohan, and Vegeta\'s words if it\'s either Gohan or Trunks, but you make it look a bit...well...ridiculous.

And for fucks sake - how many people there were at the table (only Bulma\'s father and Vegeta with Gohan or what? Where was everybody else)? Was there a table-cloth? And that one: \" His hips kept jerking erratically into their hands and helplessly, wanting to cry and not being able to, Gohan laid his blushing face on the cool table, hoping no one would notice. Through it all, Vegeta stroked him soothingly …almost lovingly.\" Are they all blind????!!!!!

Well, you have skill. Try to use it.

\"Remember kid,” he yawned, sinking his head into Gohan’s soft hair, “You…you were just in view.”
What kind of child molesting bullshit is that. Vegeta is looking for a booty call...and it\'s either a teen or a child?
Hell if it wasn\'t for Gohan it would have been Trunks or even Goten?

Vegeta is a child molester? That\'s Statutory Rape!! Hell if he had to fuck...why not a whore like everyone else!

And what about the adults at the dinner table? they that blind?

Gohan may have given him a mercy fuck, but it was under threat...rape is rape and that was rape!

You made him too, much of a coward....pregnant women get fucked...put em on the kitchen table!!!

And what ...he not man enough for Kakarott? This Vegeta is truly Frieza\'s Spawn!!! Rape is Rape!!!

i liked your story you\'re a good writer continue writing!