rate_review Reviews

That was so cute! I absolutely loved it. It's cool to see a fic about Goku and Chichi's first time together, I don't think that it's been done too often. I liked the whole thing, but the best part was definitely at the end when we were reminded that Goku is not human. That was very well done. Good job!

It isn't fair to say I suck at lemons. I don't write them very often so I think this was a decent attempt. I'm not offended by your review as you were being honest. Just for future reference it's in bad taste to blantantly say someone sucks. Just tell them their weak areas and how to improve them.

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Listen, Its a greta concept and plot, but there basically no detail in this, Its just that there was barely any detail. It started great but the lemon scene was too fast and un exiciting. No detail! When they were giving each other oral, there was nothing. I was confused as to what happened, I actually had to re-read it.


But, your a good writer. But you suck at lemons. I hope this review will help instead of piss you off.