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October 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Update soon this is cool
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September 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I liked it alot. It seemed to be something Vegeta would do.
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August 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story. I think you have all the characters in character ^.^ Please update soon! I will totally be waiting for the next chapter!! I think your a great writter!! You rock!
^_^Jess^_^
^_^Jess^_^
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August 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
guuuurl...that was damn good for your first fic! U better continue...and soon!!! ^-^ It was really good, besides the few speeling errors....but who cares about that with a story this good. ^-^ CONTINUE!
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August 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you write some more chapters?
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August 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
~drools over the yummyness of this chapter~ YAY! Vegeta and Bulma got lucky! ~smacks Vegeta for being a prick~ Meanie!
Lovely chapter, congradulations on such a well rounded chapter especially for your very first one. I hope to see more from you and soon, I think you are very talented.
P.S. You might need to run spell check and grammer check, found a few booboo\'s. Try reading it aloud and you would be surprised at how easy it is to find mistakes.
Wonderful.
MORE MORE MORE MORE!!!!
Serenity
Lovely chapter, congradulations on such a well rounded chapter especially for your very first one. I hope to see more from you and soon, I think you are very talented.
P.S. You might need to run spell check and grammer check, found a few booboo\'s. Try reading it aloud and you would be surprised at how easy it is to find mistakes.
Wonderful.
MORE MORE MORE MORE!!!!
Serenity
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August 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
So cool! Please update soon! I have to see what happens next! ^_~
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August 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Not too shabby for a first time. You just need to find a beta-reader or something. Someone good with grammar and spelling.
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August 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
add more...why did you stop when it getting good...you trying to kill me or something...hurry up...i haven\'t got long...you better update
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August 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
that was really good. I love these stories. pleze continue to write more chapters, maybe hit spell check once in a while. if u don\'t, I won\'t care. I would still read. keep writing, keep writing, keep writing.