rate_review Reviews

Goooooorgeous fic! Amazing, impacting and proably too much first chapter and good development later. The clueless Gohan and the engaging sexual aspect was a little PWP in my oppinion, but you saved it all with Goku's INCREDIBLE monologue. And I adored their characterization.

Amazing, amazing fic. :D

* About Trunks thinking that Gohan might be pregnant:
I think I’ll kill Mirai after I regain consciousness.

* About Goku's bissexuality:
Goku gives me a strange look, frantically rubs his forehead then sighs again.
“Yeah…” he nods. He isn’t looking at me.
Fun.

* About Trunk's happiness after Gohan's declaration:
Pick flowers..?

* About *Vegeta*:
“I’ll fucking kill him when I get back!” I snarl at Vegeta.
“That’s the spirit, boy!” Vegeta flashes his sharp teeth at me. “Care for a spar?”

Those were the best pearls I could remember, but of course, there were much, much more.

And Gohan's comments to sex are godamn brilliant

Part 11 when Trunks gets jealous of Gohan because he thinks he's been with someone else... I guess the two or six Buds I had kinda made me a little confused, but was there something to that? Or Trunks was just crazy in jealousy?

I don't know much about Sayajin tradition but is that bite bond thing real? 'Cause I've seen it in several other fics before.

Loved Naruki. I usually don't like OC, but I'll be damned if he didn't look like part of the story! (as a DBZ character I mean) and when I find myself hating someone (as I hated Eriava) I know how great the autor is, to stir such feelings at the reader. So all your OCs were great, in a way that I really liked or really hated them, because of their personalities.

I wish I could read more of your stories, but I'm mostly interested in Trunks x Goten or MTrunks x Gohan right now, so I'll skip the Goku x Vegeta for the time being (plus I tend to have an allergic reaction to mpreg >.>)

Please keep on writing. You certainly got the skills. (especially please finish When there are two of me. holy shit, I guess this is the third review where I beg this =_= sounding like a slave already xD)
Love, Nana666

whoa!!!! it´s honestly a shame that you cant make money with your stories, ya know?! and again i´m jelous, because i know one cant learn that way of writing, by visiting - probably boring- writing lessons or something more weird. ^^ even if i´m in danger to repeat myself, your stories are very adorable.
well, and therefore, i can truly say, that i am muuuuuuch more impressed than jelous!!! ^-^
damn. you´ve already killed me with the first chapter!
that was just heart attacking. ( the whole story was, but the beginning was really an heartbomb, to me. at least it felt like one.
first i wasnt sure, if i want to read further, ( normally, i only can handle a dead chichi. yeah. who cannot. ^^° ) what else can i say? it was a way above emotional to read this. i was able to feel with the characters as always in your stories. and especially the way you created such a real atmosphere for your readers is amazing and it works perfect in every single sentence. there are so many exaples for that "real - feeling" thing. the diapers and gokus whole state after the fight, gohans agressive behaviour, and to find a balance between a leader and very sensitive, emotional trunks is just so awesome! *giggle* hadnt a doupt that he will get gohan, even if i hadnt know, that this was a gohan x mirai pairing yaoi. ^-^

hmmm. for some reason, i was more than just worried the whole first chapter an in the second one, maybe the third too; That the god would come back to fullfill his sick killing- rule the universe- thing. it scares me to death, when kakarott has gone cathatonic, because i thought that he might be was taken over by that god or something, and that he would kill further through goku, then. O.O`
err. ^^° cant describe or explain why i thought that, but i did a long time. ^^°°°

oh and it was interesting to read, that seventeen was involved in your story!
i didnt expectet him to show up.
but yah, i do like surprises like that.
a good story always is surprising people, in all imaginary ways, i think. ^^
welllllll, left to say: ( actually there´s more left to say than this,
but i think this will do it either i think ) :
keeeep on writing Fanfictions or whatever you want to write, please! d^^b
j.u.s.t.
i.m.p.r.e.s.s.i.v.e !!! :D

bye. :)

ok i just got to read and it was great, as always, im just sad its over.

i wanted to go ahead and get this out there in case i don't get to read this chapter and forget. hah, i had forgotten i even said anything about goku and seventeen! it seems so weird to me now to think about it. i love seventeen actually, i guess i was just in a mood that day for some goku/vegeta. anyway, i do love this fic, its nothing like i thought it would be at the beginning.

Nice ending with great sex! that rocks thanx for updating and ending!

this is amazing, im so happy that vegeta is back. but i wish he was alive! i dno't want goku with seventeen. not that i don't like seventeen, i do. but vegeta is the only one for goku!!!!

Hey you! I'll have to keep this relatively short but I wanted to drop by and thank you for the updates! I was SO excited to see that you'd been working on this, and very well too. I'm still a bit confused (as is Gohan) at how he is feeling and dealing with Mirai. Their relationship is so turbulant and I think it kind of sucks that it seems almost one sided.

I was DUMBSTRUCK to see that you inculcated Vegeta into the story and that's wonderful! He's quite in character, a feat in itself, and I think it will be very interesting to see how those two interact in such a small space. I need to continue to the next chapter but great job!

Camaro

Whoo and the plot thickens! I'm really loving Vegeta in this. He's very... himself yet at the same time, holds a bit more depth and appeal than some of the others. Though I've never been much of a "bond" fan, it's not too bad in this. Seems that Mirai's and Gohan's relationship really progressed without their permission even! hahaha crazy.

I'm slightly wondering if the closeness of Gohan and Vegeta is very...safe with regards Gohan's raging hormones and horniness and Vegeta's former "fling" with his father. Weird!

Can't wait for more babe.. I've missed ya.

Camaro

this chapter had a little of everything. nice to see 17.
trunks explaining *err* things, to gohan was so well done i myself could believe it... yeah i enjoyed this a lot.
about datano, like gohan i just couldn't buy that lame story they came up with. i wonder what's gonna happen.
also i can't help but mention the last scene with goku. it was hilarious. is this going to turn into a comic story?
keep the good work!