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for Persistence

by chayron

person kit-kit
schedule October 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wow its about time there meet up
person chibi_vegeta
schedule October 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM


Nicely done cliff...*snerks*

*eyes calendar*...and where _have_ you been?

person kit-kit
schedule October 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
nice chapter vegeta dad made the hate come its all vegeta\'s dad fought.
person chibi_vegeta
schedule October 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM


ouch.

okay...if you\'re late updating again I might get.....restless...*snerks*

person Webtester01
schedule October 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wonderful chapter!
I think that Veliro should have told him the truth by the time they reached the turning point by the lake. But this is more intersting.
There were a few missing words in some of the sentences but overall it was enjoyable to read.

Keep it up. Once I find a way to set aside some time, I\'ll continue the stories I have written.

Good luck.
person ~anz~ ^_~
schedule October 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hmm...well \"Veliro\" finally got some...he certainly was PERSISTENT!

Apparently the \"starcrossed lovers\" couldn\'t catch a break...after all that...to be thwarted by your own father...and kakarott...he now believes he was used...ruthlessly....and the betrayal...

What is to become of them?

\'til next time!
person Macha
schedule October 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
@!@@#$?!@ It makes me so mad that Velrio\'s father can\'t see love when it\'s real *sighs* Well, this is going to make for an interesting story any way.

Ah, as far as the power thing is concerned, I am more than alright that it doesn\'t get explained. :) Although, for one moment, I had a thought, \"What if working in the smithy makes it so Kakarott\'s tail tip is dirty... but then, I remembered all the regular bathing. *drools*

Any way, good chapter... looks as though things are going to get worse before they get better.
person ~anz~
schedule September 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Addicted to Kakarott? ...ummm yummy!!!
person Webtester01
schedule September 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 2

Heh. Things are getting more interesting by the day. :) Poor confused Veliro.
And Kakarott, with his shyness :D

I look forward to chapter 3.
person Macha
schedule September 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Excellent chapter. Nice back ground setting. Mwuahahahahah... Now Veliro (sp?) is going to have a ton of questions as to how a third-class became so strong, and I am interested in seeing how you are going to tell it. :)

YAY, I love this story.

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