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September 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
WOW! Loved it! Please write more KaixRei soon! Can\'t wait to see what\'s gonna happen when they meet! =)
See ya soon, I hope! XD Bye!
See ya soon, I hope! XD Bye!
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September 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
chapter 1 and we already see kai giving himself one!!! nice!!!
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September 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oooh! How wonderful!! That scene with Kai was absolutely delicious!!
X9!
I can\'t wait for more. I love Kai\'s attitude and the sezzy image of Rei dancing *o*!
X9!
I can\'t wait for more. I love Kai\'s attitude and the sezzy image of Rei dancing *o*!
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September 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I like the way this starts off, with the silk and hair and all the twirliness.. I love figurative and descriptive writing... It\'s all so poetic. You manage to do what I have never achieved and that\'s introduce the plot or the outline of what\'s happening/happened in the first 500 words or so. I hate writing first chapters. Oooh... you aren\'t bashing Mao! I love people who don\'t make everything bad happen to one character, very unrealistic when that happens and in Beyblade they usually pinpoint Wyatt, Boris, Hillary or Mao. I hope you don\'t kill her, that\'ll make this like the first ever ReiXKai that hasn\'t got a brutally bashed Mao in it.
Kai\'s last walk down the runway?? So he\'s quitting or something?? Ooh, found a typo. arroused instead of aroused, well, I\'m guessing it\'s a typo because your spelling and grammar seems to be pretty much flawless, which I really love about you. I love good grammar, and I love writers who use it. I\'m an OCD nutcase so bad grammar tends to make me flip a little.
nazy hair? Another typo. Gah. Typos are annoying, aren\'t they?
So are Max and Takao going to get on well with Rei, despite the gypsy thing? I hope so, I even have that whole \'hunch\' thing going on.
Hehe... I\'m guessing that Kai is somewhere in the middle of room 573 right about now??
Good job, you write very well, and I wouldn\'t worry about this being compared to Innocent Dance - much too different. I\'m wondering if you have a BETA, because the lack of mistakes and the neat style of writing you have is really rare in un-Beta\'d fanfics.
~studio
Kai\'s last walk down the runway?? So he\'s quitting or something?? Ooh, found a typo. arroused instead of aroused, well, I\'m guessing it\'s a typo because your spelling and grammar seems to be pretty much flawless, which I really love about you. I love good grammar, and I love writers who use it. I\'m an OCD nutcase so bad grammar tends to make me flip a little.
nazy hair? Another typo. Gah. Typos are annoying, aren\'t they?
So are Max and Takao going to get on well with Rei, despite the gypsy thing? I hope so, I even have that whole \'hunch\' thing going on.
Hehe... I\'m guessing that Kai is somewhere in the middle of room 573 right about now??
Good job, you write very well, and I wouldn\'t worry about this being compared to Innocent Dance - much too different. I\'m wondering if you have a BETA, because the lack of mistakes and the neat style of writing you have is really rare in un-Beta\'d fanfics.
~studio
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September 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Lol. Let me guess. He gets stuck with the stuck up jerk Kai. Why did Tyson and Max look at him like that? Hope they get over it. Love this story and how you\'ve put Ray. He fits a dancer\'s personality. Update soon.
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September 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
lol not bad^^ keep going plz