rate_review Reviews

great chapters

There are VERY few stories with the flavor this one has. Thank you very much for writing it. However, there are a few things I\'ve noticed, things happen a little too fast. Its great if it is a short story, sure...but if it is to be long, like this one appears to be. things should slow down, put more detail in between. This story is very reminiscent of the ‘Sword of Truth’ series, or the ‘Wheel of Time’ book series, and the authors tend to jump around a little in those books but not as much as you seem to. To put it simply, the plot shouldn\'t be so blatant and there should be more of it. Your story is a bit shallow, even if the language is brilliant. Not that I\'m talking down to you. You’ve obviously got skill. So keep up the good work! And watch out for those typos and spelling errors!