rate_review Reviews

This is wonderful. I love how you kept Vegeta in character. I can actually see this happening. Though I don't know if I can see Yamcha stepping away like that. Can't wait to read the other stories now.

*goes off to continnue reading*

Ja ne
Kireania

this was SO FUCKING good. it was really original. i appriciate that. thank you so much for this story. it made my lonely, rainy night!

::Looks up at cassie's review::

::busts out laughing::

Oh my GOD!! hahaha... I'm so glad we have so many cultured people around here! LOL!!

Camaro

Bejita??? who is this guy? i thought the story was about vegeta and bulma???? is it just a miss spelling??

hi excuse me.. i\'ve seen this fic before in fanfiction.net do u write there as well?

Wow...... There\'s so much going on in this one chapter. First, even though you didn\'t out right say it, I liked the fact you portrayed their first time together as some sort of science experiment. Vegeta is testing a theory, and that is something that Bulma would certainly understand.

Second, you touched on a point that most people forget, or don\'t think of. One of the DBZ movies shows Goku healing a bird after an enemy attack. Although Dende and senzu beans are usually used for healing in the series, that one point in that one movie showed that sayians were capable of healing to some extent. Well done!!!! (This was probably my favorite part of the chapter.)

This is definitely A/U with Vegeta still having his tail.

Vegeta\'s disgust in Nappa\'s behavior, and then his unwillingness to discuss whether someone had tried to touch him in a manner he saw unfit was... interesting. Makes me wonder about bits of his past.

There were a couple of moments where I was slightly confused. At the beginning of the chapter you mentioned something about Bulma\'s tummy being rounded, and then other points that led me to believe she was already preganant, so I thought she had been artifically incemanated, because other parts of this were clear that this was their first time together. Then Vegeta was talking about her being preganant after this tryst.

The lemon, although graphic (not in a bad way :) ), was a bit scientific, but as I mentioned before, this was certianly a believable first time for them.

There were a couple of typo\'s, but nothing major. Your grammar was outstanding, or at least nothing that I noticed.

All in all, excellent job!

I like how this story starts out. how they both taught each other. i liked the ending as well. I hope you write more!!!