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I have to continue in an entirely new review. Damnit.
The part where Ed leaves Roy tied to the bed was laugh out loud. He just runs out the door. God, I felt so sorry for the poor guy. Left alchemized to a bed unfinished.
The story also had it's dramatic parts. Parts that just made you want to break down inside. And, I'm wondering if Chapter 15 is the last chapter. I'm not sure if you made it the last chapter or not. But, it seemed like a good finale. I would like an Epilogue, though. The story was great because it gets through to readers. You feel like you're actually there, and that's what makes it a fantastic piece.
Well, that's it for me. I hope to see another chapter or Epilogue from you, and I'll also be looking for more stories by you.

May I add something to D/H's review.
I understand what you're talking about, but you don't know anything. What the writer is doing is creating suspense, a thrill. You anticipate that they're going to have sex, but they don't, and it's supposed to frustrate you. It's supposed to eat you up so much that you have to come back and see if they finally get to it. It's a great strategy for a writer to do, and makes readers almost thrilled.
This concludes my opinion.

Ohhh! This story is just amazing T_T It made me cry reading this part because I remembered how sad I was in the series! Please tell me that you're gonna write a sequel with Ed returning? Please? v_v I want him and Roy to be together. Together is nice. I'll sob miserably if they're not just like a tiny baby.

Great story and I'm twisting in my seat to see the end of it. It's so sad v_v;

Great story! Really drew me in. I put off everything I had to do and still read despite the guy playing Silet Hill beside me. ^.^

I would suggest, however, that you have this story beta\'d. I was dissapointed by the may slips in tense ad several other errors that made this brilliant story a little annoying to read. I\'m sure reading back over it would help, or if English is your second language ask someone else. I mean absolutely no offense, but it would make the story infinitely better and I think this one deserves that.

Thanks for the entertainment. First fic I\'ve read in a long time.

wow, what a great story, the charactorization is awesome and the story is just plain hilerious.

that was sooo cute! I laughed out loud several times. ^0^ More? ^_~

Oh wow, this is fantastic! I\'ve just started reading your story today and-unfortunately for me-I\'ve been trapped here until I could read the whole thing. I couldn\'t stop! I love how you personify the characters; Roy and Edward in particular. It stays true to them in the show. Also, I like how you make it a point to keep up with the fact that Ed is still a kid. So many stories I\'ve read have Edward as a master at sex after one lay. Or even worse, during his first lay. You keep it real, you ease them into it...and I applaud you for that!

Also the various tortures you place Roy through yet have him keep coming back for more is hilarious yet adorable. The Colonel will do anything for the kid, so cute.

I hope there is more, because honestly? You have me hooked.

Thanks for the great read! Though my back is currently cursing this story...ow.

Holy shit. I usually never curse in my reviews, but this is just too damn good! I love this story, I love it more than any other fic I\'ve read period. It\'s long, but it doesn\'t lose it\'s spark. Each chapter ends so perfectly, I just want more! Words cannot describe how impressed I am, no joke. I\'ve been wanting to review every chapter as I read along, but I found it best to read all the chapters thus far first, then review. I have been reading this for about 3 days in intervals, which makes me happy because I love long stories. I love how you didn\'t stray away from the characters personalities. Oh god, this is a good one, and trust me I read a lot! So I know a good one when I see one, and this is by far the best! Wow, I could go on forever! All I can say right now is, please keep it up, and I\'m looking looking forward to your next update! :)

this is story so rocks! mustang\'s sweet and wants to confort ed. that\'s really all that matters...a happy ed. please oh god(AKA you) write more to this enticing story!!!...did i use enticing in the right context....damn english....

OMG another GREAT one. I LOVE YOU! Ed feeling sad because Al couldn't like Milly was adorable. I could so see him doing that. Oh yeah and Ed being so controlling in bed! What a turn around... Now only if he'd go all the way!!! Thank you, thank you, thank you, for gracing us with this story!