schedule
December 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Interesting, I'm not so sure of your structure, or you paragrphs, but the premise sounds interesting.
With a good beta, you'd have a nice story on your hands.
Good luck,
Millie
With a good beta, you'd have a nice story on your hands.
Good luck,
Millie
schedule
December 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ok my first suggestion would be to please seperate your story into paragraphs. Its very hard on the eyes when its just one big block.
schedule
December 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
please divide the long run-on sentence column into paragraphs...
good premise, but now i have a splitting headache...
people take the time to read ... so please show a little more effort and break this up into paragraphs.
Person's will appreciate it and reward you with decent reviews...
good premise, but now i have a splitting headache...
people take the time to read ... so please show a little more effort and break this up into paragraphs.
Person's will appreciate it and reward you with decent reviews...