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January 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
A bigger, badder Cell huh? Mwuahahahahahahaha.... I'll stay tuned.
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December 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well, this does sound like an interesting adventure fic. Haven't seen one of those for a while. I'll be back for chapter 2.
You mentioned that you wished to have any errors pointed out. I saw a few, but there are only a couple that stayed with me.
Firstly, The English language uses quotation marks as indicators that people are talking instead of dashes. "Blah blah, blah blah."
Secondly, the tenses for the verb fly. You used it in this sentence: Gohan reached him a little later, and both of them flied towards the forests, where Piccolo used to meditate.
The proper tense is 'flew'. Gohan reached him a little later, and both of them flew towards the forests, where Piccolo used to meditate.
All in all, I am very impressed with your grasp of the grammar and spelling for English being your second language. (LOL, my spelling is atrocious, and it's my native language.)
You mentioned that you wished to have any errors pointed out. I saw a few, but there are only a couple that stayed with me.
Firstly, The English language uses quotation marks as indicators that people are talking instead of dashes. "Blah blah, blah blah."
Secondly, the tenses for the verb fly. You used it in this sentence: Gohan reached him a little later, and both of them flied towards the forests, where Piccolo used to meditate.
The proper tense is 'flew'. Gohan reached him a little later, and both of them flew towards the forests, where Piccolo used to meditate.
All in all, I am very impressed with your grasp of the grammar and spelling for English being your second language. (LOL, my spelling is atrocious, and it's my native language.)
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December 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Your fic's good^^. I'll be surely back. Happy New Year^^!