rate_review Reviews

That was alittle harsh there drake220... give the kid a break, it's not like it's an original piece that they'll be getting paid for. You should learn how to use constructive criticism without being so harsh as to seem rude. Sorry, but that bugs me when people do that to other people, makes me think that they're picking on them and my natural instinct is to defend them. Oh, and person who wrote the fic, I'm sorry but I really didn't read the story. However, I will and I'll review. ^^

Just so you know, I'm Anon and I'm just reviewing for ya'. ^^ I am an author of this site too, but right now I guess I'm not logged in at the moment... ::sweat drop::. Okay, well you could use the spell check and capitalize the names, but it's still good regardless. People just wanna be pricks and make a big deal out of nothing really. I hope this doesn't scare you away from the AFF community...^^. Hope you'll swing by my stories sometime! (lol) Well, here's your review as promised. :) (:

that's ok. i think this story's interesting so far. though i have a question or 2.... 1. did Ed close the door? and 2. is this story gonna get rated NC-17 for later chapters?

Not to be too harsh but you really need a beta reader. Really, REALLY need one. Names should be capitalized, sentences should be complete, grammer and spell check are standard nowadays-use them. I mean, this really had no flow and it's like you didn't care how unpolished or...badly done your fic was. It's a good plotline but you should have more pride in your work then to put something looking like this out there. I highly suggest you redo this immediately.