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August 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Ag! I love this story! PLEASE continue it soon! I need more stoic Bra and clueless family stuff! BTW, is the rapist Yamcha or something?
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February 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
OMG... If it is who I think it is... that ROTTEN BASTARD. Oh, I hope you update soon... these little glimpses are killing me.
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February 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Great story so far, like the way you take your time developing your story while taking care not to dwell on less important details. Keep on going! By the way, I rated every chap. of Fallen 5* cause I think they earn em! Love, Maike
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January 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
WOW! That was captivating! I can't wait for more Update soon, please!
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January 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I'm glad you're posting this again. I know who the abd man is, cause I read it before... if I'm not mistaken.
Anyway, I hope Goten learns the truth of what happened to his crush a lot sooner this time!
Anyway, I hope Goten learns the truth of what happened to his crush a lot sooner this time!
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January 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I think the first person point of view was okay for the prolog. I am glad you switched over to third person for the actual story.
Longer chapter next time please?
This one was good, in that everyone is still feeling eachother out. I want to get to the confrontation part where Bra actaully has to tell someone what happened.
Longer chapter next time please?
This one was good, in that everyone is still feeling eachother out. I want to get to the confrontation part where Bra actaully has to tell someone what happened.
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January 7, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I think it is an interesting start, and the mystery you've created about 'that day' is something I just have to know now. I have a feeling I know what, but I don't know the who.