rate_review Reviews

Lol, I love the way you phrase things. So perfectly! ^^ I enjoyed this chapter (Ch. 6) immensely! :) (:

You are a genius! The way you write these two is so incredibly spot on! I love how the humor and the smexy work together to make this story so utterly fantastic. I can't wait for the next installment! Ahhh... the kitchen. :-D

oh my gosh! Poor Ed!... well... poor Winry too, but poor Ed and his being male... Loved the Gravi reference btw.

This is a really good story so far... alot of the parts are so hilarious that I nearly fall out. :) (:

"Being obsessed with FMA is a gooood thing. Right?"
Thank you, thank you, thank you for pointing out I'm not alone. After a day with my siblings ragging at me about this, it is heartening to know I'm really not a freak. And it's great to see you back with an update......

On to the story:
Edward is dense. Truly dense. Really dense. He can search for the Stone, love his little brother, fight with the Bastard Colonel, dodge Scar and the Homunculi (sounds like a bad emo band name), but he can't say the "O" word. Putz. Are all males such idiots? For all his pretense at sophistication, I bet Mustang can't say it either.

For an "almost lemon" which just skimmed the surface of the sex Ed and Winry had, chapter 3 is remarkable, I feel like such a clumsy fool when I look at the lemon I have been attempting. Great dialog as always, the pair may seem OOC so some people, but maybe that isn't the case when you realize they NEVER got to this point in the anime, so there is no comparison.
Maybe later in the manga....

Glad to see this posted and read the final product! I love this story with a fiery passion! I can't wait to read more! :-D Fantastic work as usual!

I kept forgetting to review. Shame on me. ;_; THIS FIC IS MAKING LEMON/LIME FIC HISTORY. Seriously, with Ed being so realistically clueless, not very good and unsure this is history in the making. This is the first fanfic like this I've ever come across that had Ed BAD at sex. He may be sex on legs but that doesn't mean he knows what to do when it comes to it. XDDD Poor, poor Winry. She's so turned on by just the way he LOOKS (Heck, I'm surprised she doesn't "finish" just by looking at him, to be honest. XD) and yet that's as far as the poor girl gets. Hahaha! Ed and Winry need to tag team and beat the royal crap out of Roy. I love how he screws it all up without even being present. That's classic Roy. I also loved how both of them didn't really have good material. Ed had that goofy pamphlet and Winry had, I think, a romance novel. So... Winry may be thinking a bit unrealistically and Ed isn't thinking enough. SO GOOD. I really hope they get it right in the end. The two deserve it. .... Well, Winry does anyway. XD Keep it up! I can't wait for more!!

Still with the jumping, take my word for it, not only is it original (what you're doing with the clueless 'Team Elric') but it's well written. Almost to a 'Tee'! I still get alittle confused as to what's happening. I had trouble determining wether they were in the hall or the bed at one point and wether it was day or night at another. Try to work on your settings a little, focus on the surroundings rather that Ed and Winry's feelings. Don't opt out on them, just add to the fic.

Other than that I love this story and will continue to read! Update soon.

-Eve Nightingale

This is such a great idea, Ed being bad at sex haha because so many people have him be amazing (which, like you said, with a body like that, he has to be great doesn't he?) but he's on the road so much he doesnt have time to think about sex. This is a great story, I hope you do do that lemony outtake of part three. Oh poor Winry haha. keep writing! After this, are you gonna write more FMA fanfics?

Ahhh this is awesome. Don't see many fics where people suck their first time, I'm glad to see people in reality for once.