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Waaaah! Don't leave it THERE!

Trunks is a sick, twisted little animal-ripper, and is clearly the Anti-Christ. Well done, Bulma. Slag.

I don't know what to say, Camaro. This unearthly, magnificent talent of yours for angst and gore and description never ceases to draw me further and further into your awesomely dark world. While the above may sound like a back-handed compliment, please don't mistake it for anything less than honest awe. Decidedly drop-jawed amaxement that words can enact what you tell them to, that your command is so absolute that I see everything that you portray, that I'm stuck between sympathy for Kakarot and outward irritation that he didn't just go with Vegeta. Gone to enjoy hell with him and maybe had things his way for a change. But someone's gotta smack Trunks around and tell Gohan the pretty truths he needs to hear though he will forget them.

I simply leave offerings of blood roses and dry champagne, Belgian chocolate and freshest coffee at your feet, so that all good things may be yours and that as a humble, humble fan, I spread my adoration at your feet.

Write more! Please! And bring the original Vegeta back, in all his Hell King regalia!

Regards,
Zogeta

Hey Camaro. I re-read the first 2 chapters this morning. This is pure insanity. The macabe, the suffocating atmosphere, the blasphemy; I love it all. We spoke a lot about these things, and I'm still amazed by your ability to flesh out the abominable. Your descriptions of the grotesqueries and revolting behavior are unmatched in fandom, I've come to find. The sheer emotional impact you bring is reltentless and unnerves my senses. You have a way of ripping the reader out from their ass and into a bizarre spiral of another reality. I'm sure there are other authors that are very good in the sorry world of fandom, but hell, you really run with this. You're an inspiration. Hope to talk to you soon again.

X

[forgive bad english, it is not my first language] I think that your work it is very good. The way you show your peoples' feelings is amazing and makes me want to read more. I have read all of your work on this site and think that you are one of the best writers on this website. I also like the way you captured the charactors from DBZ. You write them not like anyone I have read about before. It is very human and deep. I am look forward to reading more of your stories.

Ch 1 - That was the most intense scene I have ever read, Internet or paperback. This started with an dark-romantic 19th century tone and delved quickly into a scene that would make the Marquis de Sade proud. Indeed, quite bold!

Ch 2 - A very unique way in recapping all that happened in the first Monster and what has happened after. Trunks's behaviour is indeed very, very cold. And the flow of the narrator's voice is very natural, thank goodness; you don't get that very often in stories.

(chpt5)

Another fabulous chappie! One thing that really strikes me about this story is the extremely atypical father son dynamic between Gokuu and his sons. I really like how juxtapposed Gokuu and Trunks' relationship is when compared with that of Gokuu and Gohan. Even in his swirling madness, Gohan still respects, loves and all but worships his father, or at least his memories of him. But again because of his insanity he and Gokuu can no longer have a true relationship or even normal conversation.

Then there's the complete opposite with Gokuu and Trunks. Unlike Gohan, Trunks is of relatively sound mind and body. He's spent more than enough time with Gokuu where they could have developed a real, healthy father son relationship. But instead, Trunks not only doesn't worhsip him, has no fod memory of him, and he hates him.

Gohan always seemed to remind Gokuu of the good in him, the inspirational hero in him, while Trunks always makes him feel flawed, inferior, and less than what he might have wished he was.

I just think it's a really interesting way you've set that up in the story. (Not sure if that's what you were intending but I think it's awesome)

ALSO! I meant to mention this long ago, so I'll do it now. I think it's strikingly unique the way Gokuu deals with his always lingering feelings for the "late" Bejiita. I love how he'll jump back and forth between feelings of anger, shame and remorse, then talk at great length about how much he misses him. A fact that was made SO very clear a few chapters ago when he fantasized about what he'd do to Bejiita's till surprsingly sexy corpse if he ever found it. Some how Gokuu missing Bejiita enough to want to fuck his "lifeless" body just to be with him again screamed "I love you" is a strange and sweet and somewhat sick way. ^_^ Just thought I'd let you know.

Great job on everythnig. I can't begin to praise the craft, love and care you so obviously wove into every word of this story.

*off to read chpt 6*

-Rena "sama" :)

Wow everyone is seriouly trippin' in the chapter! I'm not sure of these are just A) insane greusome visions that preclude the ultimate resurrection of "satan," or B)if it's really happening. Personally I get the impression that this is C) a stunt meant to dredge up feelings of horror and remorse for taking the lives of people who were once dear to them, (hence why Gokuu saw Bejiita and Bulma saw her father) Or even D) All of the above. I was never good as multiple choic. Anyhoo, great compelling, thought provoking chapter. It was particularly vivid, but I guess blood will do that every time.

LOL. And yet again Camaro you manage to surprise me. Starting off the chapter with Goku complaining about how the bathtub is too small? Hilarious! I almost expected the bath to have bubbles in it too, and then I laughed my ass off when it did.

Ewww... I don’t blame Goku one bit for trying to bitch out Trunks after that. What a way to end your bath. Now, how DID the little SOB manage that I wonder? Oh, I also found his “I’m a little sweet child and never do any wrong” charade around Bulma to be interesting. OMG! EWWWW! I’m totally freaking out at the leeches right now. I despise them. Well, really, I despise all slimy worm-like creatures, but can you blame me? Oh, that little bastard... if the object of that scene was to get me to dislike Trunks for the time being, you definitely achieved your goal Camaro.

You know, if I was Goku when he turned around and saw that foot, I would have walked out of the room pretending I hadn’t seen it and complained in a loud mutter about going to watch tv or something until I fell asleep (while trying to sound like I thought everyone else was asleep and I was only talking to myself). As horrible as it may sound, I would have left Bulma there and pretended nothing unusual had happened. Kudos to Goku for actually moving towards it. Oh, and on a side note, my dislike of leeches is nowhere close to my dislike of maggots (ewww).

Well, that last part was definitely a surprise. Why on Earth did the body’s appearance change from Vegeta’s to Bulma’s father’s? Did Bulma even see Vegeta, or only her father? And why DID it take Bulma so long to wake up? Either way, I’m glad that I would have been in the living room by then. I was looking forward to a new chapter from you sooner, but you always seem to make up for any waiting. I look forward to the next chapter!!

Hmmmmm, I have a feeling it wasn't acutally Trunks that pulled the prank (if you want to call it that), but I certainly think he had something to do with it, or at least had knowledge of it. *shudders*

O.o...what the hell? Other than Bulma telling her history of she and her father, I don't recall the old man being in the story before. Did someone go and dig up his dead body? Yuck, either way.


I know who would want to mess with Goku's head like this, and parts of the reasons why, but certainly not all, and I am hoping to find out soon!!!!

oh my gosh i was not expecting that... wow.. oh wow... KEEP GOING