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Wow, those last two chapters were pretty intense. o.O Oh man, this is a great story, you really do the anime justice with this one (as well as Dusty oad)I believe. ::grin::

I didn't type the "R" in Dusty Road.... so there it is. ^^ (Lol) Don't mind me, I'm anal like that (and that could be taken in a very unflattering way... << lol!). I'd have to say though, since I forgot to in the last review, Russell's certainly on the prowl when it comes to the pretty ladies, ne? I never really thought of him to be like that in the anime... ::shrugs::. He seems to be all business, just like Ed. ^^ Still, wonderful story nonetheless. :) (:

Woah! You updated chapter 14 faster than I can say... Philosopher's Stone! Well, not really... But I thought I'll just say that. XD

The reunions were pretty nicely done. I'm surprised Officer Hughes didn't just arrest the lot of them right there, crazy Nazi that he is ("No Soup For You!"). ^O^

Oooh! And it's great that Alfons has a shot at living! But eh... I don't really like how Russel seems to be just going for any pretty face he meets. Really lame, ya know? (If you haven't guessed it, I really hate Noa. Slut. Skank. Non-canon HO. And shouldn't they inform her about the situation with the Ishbalian's, and the people of Lior?)

IIRC in the anime, the Philosopher's stone transmuted by Scar doesn't exactly deteriorate with time--it was the USE of it to do alchemy (as Al did), that caused it to be consumed. And since Al's armour body *was* the Stone--and not just the container for it--Al (or his armour body) was being eaten away.

I gotta say. I read Vincent Comes Home--I see you're still doing edits, ah, a writer's work is never done--anyway--I gotta say, this is another pin for ya. At first I thought, "No way, she's just gonna set it up like that...with Russel and Noa, I mean." But then, looking at it--I don't think that's your intent--which I respecfully must disagree with the review above. I don't think Russel is falling so easily for a pretty face. He's realized that Winry really is in love with Ed--and I don't think he's suddenly latched onto Noa at all. He's shown no signs of suddenly falling for her. I noted that when she came out, Alfons and Winry both were all right but he swallowed. Which is acceptable--he's a young man after all and she is pretty but that doesn't mean he's in love with her. Yes, he sat and watched her and did gesture for her hand but he doesn't like Ranen (another great use of original characters by the way, just like in VCH) and he might have felt really awkward taking a guys hand. Plus, if he had taken Alfons' hand, that would leave two women on the end--not to sound sexist but going through the Gate is rough--it makes sense to alternate. That's just in my opinion and you could have a totally different reason for doing so--that's just me. Plus, the two of them flipped when they saw the Gate and what they were in for, it might have been better to have Russel and Ranen on either sides of the two of them, because they've been through the Gate before. Having Alfons and Noa take hands also makes sense, as they are from the same world--it'd be natural, hold onto the familiar while going through something utterly terryfing that you never imagined could possibly exist.

Now, personally, if you decide to hook up Russel and Noa--that'd be interesting--especially because it seems like Russel is never used as a main character, I loved his role. But I think, like in VCH, it would all be in interpretation. Vincent cared about Tifa at the end but wasn't necessarily in love with her, was how I took it--but I know others saw it that way. Not to mention, I think you got a little more finesse when it comes to this sort of thing. I know, I know--I've read your other stuff too and read too far into shit sometimes (are you going to add more chapters to To the Skies?! I wanna read more about Cid!)--ANYWAY! I'll be interested in how you take this! Good luck!

Though--Tank is right--Stone loses power as it's used--but, you mentioned that--so, just a type/mistake? It can be easily fixed.

Oh yeah. NISSAN. WTF?! Y'know, I actually looked that up on Wikipedia to see if you were bullshitting and holy shit--you researched that! Or--knew it already, randomly--but that made me lol that you'd put that in there!

Oh man! This is amazing! It's how I felt the movie should have ended, with everyone together. I'm so eager to see how Alfons handles learning everything Ed said was true!

Yea! Three new chapters! As usual, they were very good, and I liked that in chapter... 9, I believe, you used Ed's meeting of Noa from the movie. I felt a vague sense of deja vu... ^^.

Awesome. Well written. I'm annoyed more people haven't reviewed this. It's very good, and the character devolopment is amazing. I implore you to continue writing, and thank you for the story so far.

I can actually picture their first time with each other like that. Really nice. :) (:

Ha, the ending to chapter 8 was funny! ^^ Poor paranoid Russell. :) (:

Woot! You added a chapter! ^^ I really like the way you describe Al's discovery of his new ability, very nice. So, this is my review for "Soul". Oh, and thank you for updating (lol)! :) (: