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October 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
OMG OMG YOu have to update like asap I love your story it so rox!!!!!!!! Plz update
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September 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
PLEASE UPDATE !!!!!!
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September 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
hi!!! i really like your story
please update soon!!!
ps: your grammer is NOT that bad
please update soon!!!
ps: your grammer is NOT that bad
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August 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
So f*cking awesome!! i love it... please please update this asap...
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August 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
To: Nashia
I have something to add to that, it seems you don't have much cat knowledge to start with, yes they have good timing. But their balance, without tail, sucks big time. They need their tail for balance. And about the Rei part, isn't the writer deciding what happens and you'll just have to go with it? Sorry for being a biatch like that but it's not your decision, I advise you to write for yourself if you have your idea's. And seriously.. don't go into the professional character explanation part, it's really mind numbing.
And just so you know, shitty and crappy aren't a good explanation, give a good reason why it 'sucks' not because you say so like everything you say goes.
And last but not least, this story is in my opinion pretty darn good, her writing skills are quite advanced even though her granmar may not be perfect, and to be honest. Yours isn't all perfect either, none isn't really. Appreciate a person's effort and taste for art as in this case is writing.
That's all I had to say, I don't have anything against you. But if you give some critique, do it good and don't bring it like you own it all.
Diamond Red Rose has spoken.
PS: DarkCrimson, You rock my socks and so do your stories! ^_~
I have something to add to that, it seems you don't have much cat knowledge to start with, yes they have good timing. But their balance, without tail, sucks big time. They need their tail for balance. And about the Rei part, isn't the writer deciding what happens and you'll just have to go with it? Sorry for being a biatch like that but it's not your decision, I advise you to write for yourself if you have your idea's. And seriously.. don't go into the professional character explanation part, it's really mind numbing.
And just so you know, shitty and crappy aren't a good explanation, give a good reason why it 'sucks' not because you say so like everything you say goes.
And last but not least, this story is in my opinion pretty darn good, her writing skills are quite advanced even though her granmar may not be perfect, and to be honest. Yours isn't all perfect either, none isn't really. Appreciate a person's effort and taste for art as in this case is writing.
That's all I had to say, I don't have anything against you. But if you give some critique, do it good and don't bring it like you own it all.
Diamond Red Rose has spoken.
PS: DarkCrimson, You rock my socks and so do your stories! ^_~
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August 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I forbid you to get rei raped or molested or even get his first kiss stolen by those assholes.besides garland's and brooklyn's rep is shitty.if rei screams rape (which he wont coz he is my baby and you can have anyone BUT rei raped )they will get expelled.rei may have crappy parents but their rich and i dont think his ma would be too happy .also the school is crowded so yeah.
that said your grammar/spellings have really improved although it could have been better.i liked the dream sequence and the flashbacks a lot but this chapter was so long and the story is already onto chapter ten but there is no murder let alone a punishment.considering the gap between updates this story could take a long time. could you pick up the pace.i like the length but in some places the contents drag.
is tala a drug dealer or an addict. he wouldnt sink that low for dealing but he hasnt displayed any effects in the little he has appeared in the story.also some drugs can have a harmful effect on the voice after an extended period so im not syre tala would risk that
whatever happened to neko jin balance .cats have great balance and speed not to mention their timing does not suck crap and they can calculate distane pretty accurately(i think) .besides rei knows martial arts so he is not entirely defenceless.
i am still hoping for a kairei coz i love it but their is no serious smut as yet XD
sorry to hear about your family problems hope you clear them soon and good luck with the next chapter .
that said your grammar/spellings have really improved although it could have been better.i liked the dream sequence and the flashbacks a lot but this chapter was so long and the story is already onto chapter ten but there is no murder let alone a punishment.considering the gap between updates this story could take a long time. could you pick up the pace.i like the length but in some places the contents drag.
is tala a drug dealer or an addict. he wouldnt sink that low for dealing but he hasnt displayed any effects in the little he has appeared in the story.also some drugs can have a harmful effect on the voice after an extended period so im not syre tala would risk that
whatever happened to neko jin balance .cats have great balance and speed not to mention their timing does not suck crap and they can calculate distane pretty accurately(i think) .besides rei knows martial arts so he is not entirely defenceless.
i am still hoping for a kairei coz i love it but their is no serious smut as yet XD
sorry to hear about your family problems hope you clear them soon and good luck with the next chapter .
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August 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Sorry I didn't review this earlier but I haven't been checking the Beyblade section lately. But I've read the latest chapter and I must say I enjoyed it very much. Mostly cause of Kai and I can't wait for the next chapter. So keep up the great work and update soon.
oh and I would help with the grammer but a) I'm only decent myself so you'd be better off with someone else and b)I would change too much, sentence structure wise and then I would hate myself for it cause this is your story. So I hope you find a wonderful beta or in the least keep this story going cause I'll keep reading either way.
oh and I would help with the grammer but a) I'm only decent myself so you'd be better off with someone else and b)I would change too much, sentence structure wise and then I would hate myself for it cause this is your story. So I hope you find a wonderful beta or in the least keep this story going cause I'll keep reading either way.
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August 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I thought you add another chapter because it was at the top.UPDATE SOON OK.I just love this story.
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July 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
update soon.one ? what does the title name mean i'm confused help me out.PLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASE UPDATE SOON.OH YEAH MORE ACTION FOR RAY AND KAI IF THERE THE ONE THAT'S A COUPLE
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July 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
hey you
i really love your story!!
please update it soon!!!!!
i really love your story!!
please update it soon!!!!!