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June 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Okay, where's the REST of it? More, Woman! NOW!! And why havne't you posted this in SJS?? too Gory?? Anyway, I want you to know that I LOVE it, and you better let me know when you post the next chapter!! I mean it!!
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June 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hey,
So the little princy is masochistic. Was this his plan? – To get himself a new playmate? Now I wonder how he is going to stop that his playmate from killing him… Though, probably there will be a two-sided connection: Kakarott does seem to like subdue the other. Though, Kakarott probably would get bored soon – I didn’t notice that Vegeta would have been a worthy opponent for him. Though, yeah, on the other hand – where would he get a worthier one?
Anyways, the fighting scene was cool!
So the little princy is masochistic. Was this his plan? – To get himself a new playmate? Now I wonder how he is going to stop that his playmate from killing him… Though, probably there will be a two-sided connection: Kakarott does seem to like subdue the other. Though, Kakarott probably would get bored soon – I didn’t notice that Vegeta would have been a worthy opponent for him. Though, yeah, on the other hand – where would he get a worthier one?
Anyways, the fighting scene was cool!
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June 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Macha! What a great start to a story that's going to shock the world. I'm totally enjoying the way that you are chracterizing the split personalities of the Saiya-jin life on Earth. It seems to me that Vegeta is always looking for someone who is like him. I guess it's his ultimate goal to find someone that is just as ruthless as he is, and we all know that no matter how GOOD Vegeta seems to be, we all know he can be a dangerous, brutal bastard in the end.
I'm looking forward to the updates, my dear. ^_^ Oh, yeah, I'm updating Breath of Sorrow again. Yay!
I'm looking forward to the updates, my dear. ^_^ Oh, yeah, I'm updating Breath of Sorrow again. Yay!
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June 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
At first, Goku was surprised, and then he laughed, “Ah, that’s the part I’ve been neglecting. It’s sort of like a physical command. If all it took were to think about someone strongly enough, then I’d be instantly transmitting every time I searched out a ki. I’ve trained myself to respond to the touching of my forehead: sort of like a trigger or button I guess. I don’t go until the trigger has been pulled.”
Finally, finally some explanation why Goku puts his fingers on his forehead. I truly liked it! My earnest compliments!
He didn’t have to wait long before he received an answer. “So, if I could manipulate a ball of my ki to be independent and sustainable for say…5 minutes, you’d be able to teleport to it?” [...] Goku scratched his head, thinking about it, “I don’t know. I suppose I could…I’ve just never tried it. What would happen if I were able to detect both you and the ki ball? I don’t know if I would be able to teleport at all, or even worse, I’d try to go in both directions, and be pulled apart in the process.”
The imagination of this! Loved it, it’s a wonderful dwelling on the problem. I’m amazed by how you thought out the technical details and went through all the trouble while trying to make Goku look at the ki-ball. It’s great!
So Vegeta has called Kakarott out? Tsk, tsk, tsk… O.o I smell trouble...
Finally, finally some explanation why Goku puts his fingers on his forehead. I truly liked it! My earnest compliments!
He didn’t have to wait long before he received an answer. “So, if I could manipulate a ball of my ki to be independent and sustainable for say…5 minutes, you’d be able to teleport to it?” [...] Goku scratched his head, thinking about it, “I don’t know. I suppose I could…I’ve just never tried it. What would happen if I were able to detect both you and the ki ball? I don’t know if I would be able to teleport at all, or even worse, I’d try to go in both directions, and be pulled apart in the process.”
The imagination of this! Loved it, it’s a wonderful dwelling on the problem. I’m amazed by how you thought out the technical details and went through all the trouble while trying to make Goku look at the ki-ball. It’s great!
So Vegeta has called Kakarott out? Tsk, tsk, tsk… O.o I smell trouble...
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June 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Terrific writing style. It\'s obvious you really took your time with this chapter and really put yourself into Vegeta\'s character. He\'s very indepth, almost to the point of making the reader feel uncomfortable with how much we can relate to his more.... masochistic desires.
Yeah, that\'s a good way to word it. This story is very uncomfortable to read, really revealing to the reader, even about themselves.
I like that Vegeta also thinks about Bulma, as rare as this is, understanding that he really is rather selfish, that he ought to be fucking grateful to have her... yet isn\'t completely.
He really appeals to the more humane side of all of us, accepting our vanity and cruelty, yet continuing to strive towards them regardless.
He wouldn’t be able to forgive himself if he lowered himself to anyone’s level in order to feed this neurotic craving. Especially not to someone he could kill in a heartbeat. Even the thought brought a bitter taste to his mouth.
I liked this line... It really struck me as interesting, the length towards which we all strive for an equal. Especially at this point in my life, I understand the virtue of intelligence and strength in another person and know that without that, at least on a most basic level, they aren\'t worth the time it takes to waste breath on them. Vegeta grasps this as no other being does, an it is a cruel fate considering there are so few people in the galaxy that could match his strength either mentally or physically.
So much to think about in this story. Truly, its a gem.
Camaro
Yeah, that\'s a good way to word it. This story is very uncomfortable to read, really revealing to the reader, even about themselves.
I like that Vegeta also thinks about Bulma, as rare as this is, understanding that he really is rather selfish, that he ought to be fucking grateful to have her... yet isn\'t completely.
He really appeals to the more humane side of all of us, accepting our vanity and cruelty, yet continuing to strive towards them regardless.
He wouldn’t be able to forgive himself if he lowered himself to anyone’s level in order to feed this neurotic craving. Especially not to someone he could kill in a heartbeat. Even the thought brought a bitter taste to his mouth.
I liked this line... It really struck me as interesting, the length towards which we all strive for an equal. Especially at this point in my life, I understand the virtue of intelligence and strength in another person and know that without that, at least on a most basic level, they aren\'t worth the time it takes to waste breath on them. Vegeta grasps this as no other being does, an it is a cruel fate considering there are so few people in the galaxy that could match his strength either mentally or physically.
So much to think about in this story. Truly, its a gem.
Camaro
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May 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Excellent story! Intriguing plot and very intense - cannot wait to read more.