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for The Yamcha Series

by FireCracker

person kit-kit
schedule July 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
wow what sleazy sayians
person kit-kit
schedule July 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
oohh this is a game to yamcha it seems like to me
person kit-kit
schedule July 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
wow krillen doesn't understand what he said
person chayron
schedule June 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Thank Gods, Yamcha appeared to be a lesser idiot than he seemed to be after reading several first paragraphs. But still, he was weird.

_You\'d probably hit me for doing that if you knew. But what a way to go, ne?_

I liked this one. Funny, and something I think Yamcha would say.

_Beautiful saiyan. I wonder...do you guys make love like humans? Close enough, I guess. You\'ve got a kid with Chi Chi._

His thoughts show that he has suffered a serious brain damage while carrying Goku’s heavy carcass…

He thumbed the sensuous lips, tilting the finely planed face to his own. A tide of emotion overwhelmed the z warrior in its intensity. Unthinking, Yamcha pressed into another kiss. Gentle fingers stroked along feverish shoulders.

No, but really, Chichi is right – Yamcha IS sick! The guy is dying, breathing fire, and Yamcha is ready to jump him…

If the beginning (well, right to the middle) of the story was rather…weird? Well, I understand – a traumatized Yamcha and everything…ahem. But, I liked how the story went further. Even if Goku acts completely OC, I liked him. I loved that there wasn’t that stupid play when two characters are beating around the bush. Some authors (for example I *duh!*) make it last for hell knows how long while the two are dying from love, glancing at each other and keep silent. I love forwardness.

There was one thing though. Then, when English people start speaking in Japanese… Or was it opposite? – The entire story was told in English by Japanese people and then they got pissed off from speaking in English and decided to add something in Japanese? Believe me, it doesn’t give any feeling of the characters being Japanese, it just seems that suddenly, for some reason, people decided to speak in Japanese. But those were only several words (I saw several stories where I needed a dictionary), so don’t mind me. It’s just a friendly advice.

Oh, and how are things with Chichi?
person ~anz~
schedule June 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
it starts out well, but then becomes shallow and superficial
...too pat of an ending...
person kit-kit
schedule May 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
wow

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