rate_review Reviews

Hey, really great, I think its funny. But can you like, make it run together better?

you know

not like

this?

it's kinda hard to read it like that, so, can you fix it next time?

Seems interesting

oh boy where do i start. The only thing i can really applaude is the storyline that was very original. However, u need to flesh out the story a little more Personally i feel that the whole yamchu cheats bluma and she goes to vegeta is a little played out. Be bcareful of ur grammar ifu would like a beta reader just email me.oh and try to make a sex scene soon to keep readers interested. do a little reasearch on collage life to make it a little more in depth


Don't give up!