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November 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Amazing! The poignant scenes and deep thoughts in this story, really draws me in.
I look forward to see what happens when Vegeta finishes his training.
Keep up the great writing!
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November 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This chapter is by far the best so far. This includes story line and writing style! You kept my interest the whole chapter...and it was a long one!
Can't wait for the update!
Can't wait for the update!
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October 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This chapter was just great. I love how you have portrayed Vegeta, and now that he has finally decided to go searching Goku things are getting more interesting. I can't wait for the next chapter, I want more!
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October 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Great story!!!!!
The point of views are very captivating.
I look forward to more. I give this story a 10/10.
Keep it up.
The point of views are very captivating.
I look forward to more. I give this story a 10/10.
Keep it up.
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October 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
YEAH! I am glad you switched to Vegeta's POV for a bit.
I do have to wonder if Vegeta thinking about Goku as Goku, and not Kakarott, was intentional on your part.
Hmmmm, what will Vegeta do when he arrives at that planet? What will he do if and when he finally finds Goku?
I do have to wonder if Vegeta thinking about Goku as Goku, and not Kakarott, was intentional on your part.
Hmmmm, what will Vegeta do when he arrives at that planet? What will he do if and when he finally finds Goku?
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October 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
ah vegeta is finally coming to his senses.
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October 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Nice, you do a wonderful job talking from Vegeta's point of view. I also kind of like the connection with Goku subconsiously knowing, at first, that he wasn't from Lais, and i like even more the planet purging - Vegeta and crew - similarities. I can't wait to read more!!
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September 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Very fascinating. I like how you write this character's point of view. Those red creatures will get what is comming to them.
Keep it up.
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September 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
wow this is certainly different. i don't dislike it but it may take some getting used to. i look forward to the next one.
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September 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hmmmmm, rather interesting. If Goku does follow through with these orders, if he ever gets his memory back, he will have walked a mile in Vegeta's shoes...
I like it! Now, you need to slow down a bit to catch the typo's MS Word would normally find...or perhaps someone will beta? *looks out at the crowd*
I like it! Now, you need to slow down a bit to catch the typo's MS Word would normally find...or perhaps someone will beta? *looks out at the crowd*