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September 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
OMG...Goku actually did it; left the planet, and Vegeta let him. MWuahahahahahahaha. Kudos!
This chapter was very angsty, and makes me want to raid my fridge! Hmmmmm, I wonder what sort of people Goku will meet on a planet that is mostly ice.
This chapter was very angsty, and makes me want to raid my fridge! Hmmmmm, I wonder what sort of people Goku will meet on a planet that is mostly ice.
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September 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH I LOVE IT- KEEP GOING!!!!!!!!!!! Please? Arigato!
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September 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
You've set the story up for a lot of angst. Now to see where it goes from here.
You need to seperate dialog paragraphs though. After one person's perspective, a new paragraph starts.
You need to seperate dialog paragraphs though. After one person's perspective, a new paragraph starts.
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September 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Aww... this was so sad. But I liked it alot :) Please come up with a sequel or another chapter.
Oh and I can't believe that was your first story, bloody amazing :)
Oh and I can't believe that was your first story, bloody amazing :)
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September 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i really enjoyed reading this, left me wanting to know what happens next, can't wait for more.