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hi ^^ yeah. for my part, i dont miss that yelly-slymi-monster thing.
but dont get me wrong please, it was "ewwwh", in good and exciting way.
i loved the idea, to let that beasty slymi - thing attack, in the right situation.
but it´s dead. good. r.i.p slymithing! *smirks*

know what? i already forgott gohan and mirai trunks (future trunks).
because you were absolutely right, with the OOC ( okay, of course you were!it´s your fanfiction^^)
but what i mean is, that i have another two guys in mind, after i have read the fic once again, including the new chapters this time.
and the thing is, that i don´t even miss trunks or gohan (the dbz one´s i mean)
errh. hm. i can´t explain that very well. sorry for that.
i just trying to say, that your way of describing the characters and everything, is very adorable.
yes and even the names are great! and all the other little details,
you always care about in the fictions of yours. i really like that.
it is very helpful to sink in the whole story and just to enjoy it, more. :)
and what´s more, normally, i dont really like OOC stories.
(well, i wouldnt dare to say all of them. i do not read or know all of them, anyways.)
But in fact, i can say, i really like yours. and of course, i´m looking forward,
the next chapter.
please keep on!!! d^^b

Ah, now the story is starting to warm up! I do like the interaction...a little concerned Gohan would hit him...but sometimes...

Yes, glad to see so many updates in a row!

My favorite part of chapter three was the end where Gohan was asking questions about Athara from Athara's aquantences, rather than asking Athara himself. :)

Let's see if I have time to read part four.

Very exciting chapter...not necessarily the kind of excitement you'd want to go looking for though.


Nicely done!

Oooooooh, predestened life for Mirai. This keeps getting better. I was thrown off with Darius' and delaros' namees for a bit. i don't know why... suppose i'm tired. There weren't any chibi's siting by a campfire thank you very much :P. My favorite part of this chapter had to be how you integrated Mirai's name into his idetity... well Athara's name. I thought it was pretty cool. Well, I'll be waiting for the next installment, hope life is treating you well.

Gucie

Parts 1-3

Chayron, you have outdone yourself again! :) I just discovered this story and really love it. This adventure is really captivating.

I did notice a few grammatical errors.

I look forward to your next update.

Ooooooo, I think I'm going to like this one. I like the intrigue and suspense a lot. Hope you update SOON.

yeah! that was a great experience! awesome job, again.
with that red creature, you painted a very strange picture in my mind, even if i was surprised, that you didn´t choose a "fishitentaklewhateverseathing" but to think, that this creature has a human form, is much more errr...interesting! and actually it is a little bit more scary.
and than, gohan and athera, both naked in a bubble (yeah, i know it was a serious situation but... *x* awwwwww, can´t stand the impressive picture i saw, while reading it.
athara seems to me, that he always seeks for the danger, even if he don´t know, that he does.-does he? ^^
i really like the names of the characters.
the scottish-sounding ones, either. for my feeling, they fit very well to the characters behavor, what they say and so on.
soooo, i´m very curious, who saved them and just wanna know, what will happen next.

bye. :)

Yes! Despite having to get used to all the new names, this story is following through on its promise of adventure! YAY!!!! :D

Very descriptive and stimulating. I want to know who made the air bubble though!

Oh, and I liked Gohan's seeing his life flash before his eyes, that was AWESOME!

You've done a great job again. Enjoyed the small fight sequence. I love everyones attitudes in this story, they make me smile while reading. Don't know why. Keep up the good work, I can't wait till the next installment. Talk to you later.