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I started reading this on fanfiction.net and I was just amazed at the realism of the story. The way Roy gains control over Ed and brainwashes him are just very believable. I was impressed at how you didn't make Roy a completely 2D villain, he's horrible of course but you've shown he can be human (to a certain degree) as well.

Also you showed the twisted pleasure Ed was getting out of the situation which I thought added realism. I think you've done a great job in putting Ed's feelings into words showing how he simultaneously loathes and desires the attention Roy's giving him and how that all makes him feel.

I thought this chapter was great for showing how Ed envies Al's innocence and how alone he is, he probably wanted at a certain level to tell Al what had happened but due to Al's age and memory loss he probably never will and if he can't tell Al, he can't tell anyone else (besides Riza of course, it's just that Al is the closest to him.)Plus being around Al is going to amplfy his feeling of dirtiness and remind him of everything he did to get Al's body back. (Oh the angst!)

Since the beginning I've just found this story extremely gripping and I really want to see how it ends so best of luck with the rest of the chapters, I'll review them all and I hope you'll update soon.

=O ok i've just finished reading the story so far and its... wow... you are an amazing writer. i was kinda iffy about reading after i saw the child abuse warning but ahh my curiosity got the best of me... =P anyways i really love it, just like all your other stories! and i would appreciate an email when you update this one please =)

again i was very impressed with how you wrote the chapter. its amazing that you can make me love mustang to death in one fic and then make me hate him and want to rip out his throat in this one... O.o i never thought i'd think of Roy as being such a bastard, but i am speechless... i dont kno why but i've never been able to understand why, if you're being abused in such a way, you wouldnt tell someone about it. maybe its just my personality, but being the spiteful person i am, i'd do everything i could to get the person in the most trouble possible >.<

You have done a good job getting into the mind of an abused child and maybe into his abuser. What goes around unfortunately sometimes comes around. Mustang was an abused child and then he turns around and abuses other children. Ed just does not have the abuser part in his soul. It is sooo sad that Ed does not realize that there are so many avenues to help but abusers know how to manipulate their victims. I have been thinking for awhile that Ed kills Mustang because Mustang started to abuse Al. (Something that many people would like to do to an abuser or have actually done.) That sad part is while we are reading this that so many people of all ages are being abused secretly who feel that they have no opportunities for help. And we can't always see it and are unable to help.

This story is incerdible. I went back to reading it after a break to think about it objectivly. I was afraid of what this story might make me feel. The emotions were powerful and what I think you ahve done best of all is the psycology behind what's being allowed to happen, and how Ed is dealing with it emotionally.

Brilliant.

*wipes tears off cheeks* dammit. You made me cry again. Even though we all know that Al lost his memories when he got his body back, it's hard to watch it happen moment to moment. The joy of their reunion lived but a brief minute before it died in the cruel light of reality. Witnessing Ed gradually realize that Al really didn't remember and then having to tell Al the highlights of their tragic past was just brutal. I didn't really breakdown until Ed was alone in the bathroom sobbing into the towel. It breaks my heart that Ed is even more alone now than he was before. Oh man! What if Al DID make the bargain of trading memories for getting his body back! whoa! That's just so...wow! I mean, the Gate does work that way - you have to give something to get something. The Gate is all about equivalent exchange. Ed didn't lose anything that we know of so it makes sense that Al would have to be the one that lost something. Oh shit! You got my mind reeling!! That makes so much sense!! Why hasn't anybody thought of this before?!? Damn you're good, ZaKai! :D

Oh my freaking GOD! Does Roy not have any respect for anything?!? The man really is completely morally bankrupt!! Seriously? Seriously?!? Damnation and hellfire Roy! ugh! Although it shouldn't surprise me, I can't believe he made Ed go down on him, in a hospital, in front of his sleeping brother no less!!!! *shakes head sadly* damn. "You’re finally beginning to be worth what I’m paying you...I expect you’ll be willing to pay for my signature as well." Why you arrogant sonofabitch! I do love Roy (not THIS version of Roy mind you! *grins*) and am kinda hesitant about him dying and all; but with all the stuff he keeps doing, he's making it easier to want him dead! He deserves it but it's gonna kill me a little bit when it happens. I'm gonna cry for Ed when that happens like I've never cried for him before! Damn, I'm already getting all anxious!! :)
Update soon!
Koneko =^.^=
P.S. I looked back at my last review to see what I meant when I wrote "encounter" (I am so random sometimes) and noticed Leigh's review stating that she couldn't understand why someone wouldn't tell if they were being abused. Has she not been paying attention to the story? The reasons are too numerous to count. The mental barriers and blocks we put up bind us as surely as any rope or chain could. She's obviously never lived under someone else's thumb and should consider herself quite blessed. It's a pain I wouldn't wish on my worst enemy.

my...gosh..this story...very addicting in a really morbid sense. the reality of the situtation makes it so much worse. crying over a story isnt my forte, but..wow..this story sure has me at the very least tearing up every chapter. it is very well written and makes my chest constrict when i read it.

I swear this story makes me cry every frikkin' time I read a new chapter. Edward was so grateful to Riza and he WANTED to tell her everything, because his strength is deterring and he doesn't WANT to... feel the things he does... and the intensity of that was really voiced in his thanking Hawkeye. I'm glad she was there or who knows what Roy might've done to him. I was just thinking of 'Hell is For Children' by Pat Benatar... it's one of my favorite songs and relates totally to this story.

I really love the raw emotions being explained and the things Ed has to do broken down in detail. I really liked the after effects of his actions and feelings after he was through with the colonel. Yes, people in abusive situations feel as if they are the bad ones and the one abusing them are doing it for their own good since they are such bad children or people in general. Most deny any such thing as abuse happens to them at all. Edward seems to be blaming himself already-- thinking that he deserves this... yet he knows he doesn't. He feels so sick of himself and his life but he can't stop because of his love for Al and that emotion and thought just makes me cry.

Ed's embarrassment at arousing himself was very well explained. You are a wonderful person. Now I feel like Ed with Riza. Thank you for your... not silence!!

This is such a beautifully heart breaking story.

Anyways, I can't wait until you update again and sorry for taking so long in reading this chapter. I was really busy with exams. Thankfully, school's out now!!

lovelovelovelovelovelove,
stupefiedNarutard

Your writing is fantastic, and I don't know how else to describe it (or how to write a reasonable review, as a matter of fact O_o).
But, I'm tired of cheking almost every day for updates, so please email me when you updade any of your stories here on AFF.net.

Thanks ^_^

kuroneko_sama@walla.com

Your story is one of most beautiful I've ever read. It made me cry (chapter 7-8 and 9: Stream of suffering! XD)! Oh, my, what a shame, at the age of 23 crying for a fan fiction! But it is so. At the beginning I couldn't understand why Ed killed Mustang (note: i LOVE Roy Mustang, I hated Ed in the first chapter for killing him). Now I wanna kill him with my hand!!! Son of a B***H! I scream against him with all my friends, i was deatly angry. What the Hell, I AM angry! I dont' know if you can undestand my feelings: as I said i Love Roy Mustang, but in this story is so disgusting that makes me feel sick! >_< Compliments with all my heart, not very often a fic do this to me. And sorry for my very very bad english, it's noy my language.
I'm Italian.
I'll waiting desperatly for an update, I'm so much curious to see what's going to happen! *_* I'll check on adultff.net every day! XD
Twin