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Poor Ed! All that, and then to find out that neither he nor his brother can condone the sacrifice necessary for the creation of the Stone...
Gods bless Hawkeye. Is that why he's telling her all this? Because of what he owes her in this chapter?
Excellent chapter; it really is. Poor Edward...

So...based on the last chapter and this one, I'm going to make a guess as to why Ed killed Roy in front of witnesses /and/ his brother. You mentioned Al's 'little body'; my guess is that Roy either made an insinuation or looked at Al the way Ed remembered Roy looking at him, and Ed snapped in order to protect Al (since that is generally the way Al operates). Or it was just the snapping point for poor Edward, and he just couldn't handle seeing Mustang...perhaps they refused to let him leave the military and he couldn't stand the thought of being around for Roy to toy with anymore? If you don't mind, I don't care if I'm wrong or right, but could you please tell me what precipitated the murder? I'll still read the story (obviously; you don't pass up this kind of writing just 'cuz you know a bit of info), but since I otherwise won't find out for months (probably) I'd really like to know now please. Please?
--tati1

*cries* Bless you, Riza, bless you!! Oh! Ed wasn't the only one who near about fainted with relief when she stepped in and offered to take Ed home with her! :) When Ed was lying on the couch deciding if he would tell Riza about what's going on with him and he decided that if she asked and 'really' wanted to know then he'd tell her, I was reminded of chapter one when she went to see him in jail and only after she said, "Ed, I want to know. Ed...please...tell me why you killed Colonel Mustang.", did Ed finally begin telling his side of the story. Oh if only she had hugged him just a bit longer and maybe tried to get him to talk about his little rampage on the streets things might not end the way they are going to (i.e. murder). It would've helped him cope so much! He might have dropped a few clues about the abuse and then she'd be able to help him get out of it but, no, all that's just wishful thinking on my part. She didn't sit up with him and talk simply because she doesn't know any better. Honestly, I think she strongly suspects something bad going on between Roy and Ed but has no proof and she doesn't want to corner Ed and force him to talk. It broke my heart when Ed paused his mini-rioting to wonder if there was anyone who was willing to love him like a son properly and why he was so willing to take someone for a substitute parent, no matter what they did to him, even if they used and abused him like second-hand garbage. (I so paraphrased that sentence!) *sobs* The actual "encounter" (for lack of anything else tactful to call it) in Roy's apartment was very well written. You had to have some graphic details otherwise it wouldn't have made sense. I had wondered how Ed was going to make himself want Roy's attention. Now I know. Desperation is a powerful motivator. I think the most impressive part of the opening scene was how close it was to one from the anime. It started off just like the anime scene but was quickly skewed and twisted into a barely recognizable raunchy parody. wow! You got mad skills! :) Add me to all your update notice lists! jill_emory@hotmail.com
Update soon!
Koneko =^.^=

jess, you updated. i liked it very much, thank god riza was smart enough to take ed to her place instead of letting him go to mustang. can't wait for next chapter. make it fast okay.

that colonel sure is a bastard! hurting poor ed, i can't believe no one is noticing that ed's changed. update soon okay.

I've been reading this for awhile and I just got the internet in the new apartment, so I thought I should review this time too. =)
This is a very well written story, and it just gets better with each chapter. You've taken a very careful approach to an issue many authors tend to gloss over or use in a completely different context. This is very well thought out, and Ed is clearly going through all the things as a real victim would, and the way you show how Mustang blames him and how easy it is for Ed to believe him. I just wanted to say I enjoy reading this story (and then looking for tissues afterward) and I can't wait for the next chapter.

I hate Ed is jail! I ABSOLUTLY HATE IT! But the way you write makes me want to read on and read on I shall!

i actually had to walk around and think about whether i should read chapter seven or not for an hour. This story is extremely hard to read. Ive read oh so many books about child abuse and yet every time i pick up a new one its still hard to actually sit down and read it. You seem like such a mature patient person.....I love how you have written this so well! Take as long as you need to write this story out. It's defimatly worth waiting for the next chapter. I would not be able to stand being touched like that. I can't even stand it when anyone over 11 hugs me for more than 3 seconds. How are you able to write so....well about this? I know you get a lot of praise about your writing and I think a lot of kids out there might appreciate you taking this seriously and not just as something pleasurable and pornographic. Basically......you rule! =]

This is probably one of the most well written pieces of literature on this site.

I was a bit too upset when I finished reading ch.7 to review, but this time I'd just like to say that I like your other story-in-progress more.... I was so completely hoping, like Ed was, that when Mustang finally did that, it wouldn't be anything like THAT. I was somewhere between crying and raging when I finished that chapter...