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That was oddly satisfying, and at the same time very scary...

My heart is really breaking here. And that last part about how because of Al's current state of being doesn't require him to sleep, Ed's safe as long as he's with that suit of armor, but it's because of Al's state of being that's "motivating" Ed to need that protection too. Gah, this is a beautiful and brilliant torture! Had to stop reading and tell you that. The situation and its ensuing feelings seem extremely realistic throughout.

I'm not a crier, but this one managed to get that reaction from me. It was almost scary how accurate the thought processes were, with Ed feeling it was all his fault even though it's obvious how much of a manipulater Mustang was when looking back on it all, but that's how it works: perfect hindsight, unfortunately. Though not always, and when it does, it tends to be too late.

Thank you for keeping up the story, and deciding to follow through with it to the end. While it may bring back unhappy or unwanted memories, it helps to see that it happens to others, too, even if in different ways.

My God, that was so devastatingly beautiful, terrible and tragic. I read this listening to The Sounds of Silence while reading this, I can't tell you the last time that I have cried so hard because of a story. This was an amazing story, and I enjoyed it, though bitter-sweet. We saw Ed in stages just like as if this had really happened to someone and I can't describe how I felt the relief and pain Ed did towards the end. I look forward to more of your work. Keep it up.

That was so utterly tragic, and you can't help but leave feel sick in the pit of your stomach. One of the possibly worst things was that Mustang cared, that as a victim himself he hurt Edward, its horrible, sickening, but so utterly realistic.I hated Mustang, with all my being, but couldn't helpbut feel immense pity for him in the same breath, and that made em feel sick to my stomach. This story is very compelling, and honestly brought me to tears during several points. During other's I was furious to the point I wanted to smash something. So emotional, and very well written.

I commend you for doing this, its a brave thing to do, and you pulled it off. The ending was befitting, and the warnings eye opening. Well done doesn't really cover it, nor does good job. Just know that you may make a difference.

*sniffles* I had no idea you'd finished this! FANTASTIC job with the fic; I think it's really important that you wrote this...
I was so depressed at the end though...could you, you know, have a small paragraph at the end that says 'fifteen years later' or something and have Ed smiling and calmer? *grins sheepishly* I'm ridiculous, I know, but I'd like some kind of reassurance that he's not in prison and that he's actually somewhat okay now.
--tati1

I truly feel for Ed, having been in the exact situation he was in for two years. Even though this is a fan fiction the truth and realism of this story is so . . . real. You are truly gifted and so strong for writing such a story, it stirred up so many emotions that I have kept hidden inside for so long. I want to generally thank you for writing a story, in the long run it truly helps, even just a little bit for me to deal with the nightmares of living through something so very painful. The shame, the anger, the helplessness, it's so true. But don't worry, it was a long time ago for me and I have continued living, everyday making small improvements to move past something and fighting everyday to not let it control my life. The only difference from Ed in such a situation is that, I am female, though the pain exists either way, and I was eight years younger than Ed was in the story. Your words at the end . . . I did find someone to confide in and being surrounded by abuse all the time is harsh and makes a lot of people untrusting and distant. But that is what family and friends are for. At 19 years old I have gotten myself and my younger brother out of such situations and we are living our lives, really living our lives. Thanks again for writing such a moving, truthful, and painful story, it has made an impact, but a positive one.

After chapter 13: I am crying. Just so intense. Such tearing up of my guts.

Amazing writing.

okay, i almost forgot to do this...

i read over about half of the reviews (not quite, but everything since the story was finished), and i have to agree with the commentors:

this is a story that sticks to you. after i finished (at 3:30 am) last night, i couldn't stop thinking about this fic until a few hours ago when some things demanded my attention. at school, i kept thinking back to this. i hugged myself about twenty times because i can't hug ed! as i got into bed there was moisture in my eyes, but i didn't know if it was because i was so tired or so heartbroken. i sleep with a baby doll, and i held her so tightly, wishing i could comfort ed. i didn't cry while i read the story, though i might have if i'd read it all at once. as it was, this took three or four tries, and there was at least a week in-between the last two. this is a marvalous story, and i will read it again, i'm sure. keep up the beautiful work.~

oh my god I can't believe I let myself read through this. This is an amazing story and I love your writing. This story hits me hard, and truthfully scares me a little...alot actually.

I hate to say the situation hits way too close to home for me.... and I hope my first sentence doesn't insult you.

are you going to post a sequel at all? because I'd want to read it if you do. let me know if you do if you can, okay? whsprsinthedrk@yahoo.com

heh...sorry if my reveiw isn't that good...your story is great, i mean that