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okay... it's been a long time, but i'm back to finish the story now! yay!!!

chapter 8:

...i hate mustang. it's ED'S fault? i don't think so. *choking mustang* imma kill him SO hard... it's so sad ed can't even bring himself to speak to al.

chapter 9:

oh my god, that's so sad. ed offered himself... it's heartbreaking. and riza! i love riza, she's so good to him and doesn't even know it!!

chapter 10:

oh... al lost his memory! poor al, and poor ed. this whole story is very sad, and ed's so depressed. it's just not fair. grr... this is all mustang's fault! i HATE him!!! i look much forward to his death!

chapter 11:

*at loss for words* i... he... i don't... he can't... this isn't... ...AHHHHHGGGG!! i can't believe this! ed's not gonna do anything elses, is he? and he shouldn't have made al promise, that just makes it worse. like i said before, abuse can breed abuse: mustang's dad -> mustang -> ed -> al oh, please let it stop where it is!! PLEASE!!~

chapter 12:

ahhh!! this is...frustrating! i kinda guessed he'd end up at mustang's. and what the hell? mustang DRUGGED him or what? i mean, i don't drink, but two beers don't do that to a person. and what the fuck was he thinking leaving al all alone??

chapter 13:

FINALLY!!! i'm so glad he's dead. the whole office scene was crazy and kinda scary, but i'm just so happy mustang's DEAD!!

chapter 14:

i'm so glad she believed (how could she not?) and i hope ed does what he needs to to get back to al and get his life back together.

this was so sad. i should have stopped reading two hours ago, but i just couldn't. i was so near done, and it's... it's a beautiful story. beautiful, heartwrenching, heartbreaking, terrible, wonderful, painful story. i loved it and hated it at the same time. i've never experienced these sorts of things myself, but i know they're terrible, and i hope that i never do have to suffer them. i wish no one had to, but, tragically, some people do. great job, it was magnificently written, and it was just...perfect in a way.~

While I was reading this story, I couldn't bring myself to feel anything, though I knew that I should feel sick, horrified or anything,just not that detached. Once I finished the last chapter, I realised that I was crying, and shaking. And when it was over I could finally feel what I hadn't been able to feel during my reading. I believe that if I had then, I wouldn't have been able to keep reading. I don't know where you found the strenght to write that story, it was painful enough as a reader, so I can't imagine what it was like for you, I mean you were the one writing it. I really do admire you, because it can't have been easy.
Reading the last chapter was such a relief, like dawn after a very very long night. Your writing is beautiful you know. I don't think there is much more for me to say. You have acomplished your goals with that story, I can tell you that much. It is impossible to be unaffected by it. It is one of these pieces that stay with you, long after you have read the final world. And thank you ever so much for saying this : "no matter the amount of the abuse, it's still abuse, and it still affects the person". So, so true. Unfortunately. That sentence means a lot to me, made me think a lot to. I've never been victim of sexual abuse, but I have been victim of abuse. And as you probably know, admitting it, writing it is hard. My best friend is the only one who knows. What you said, it made me react. I've never faced what happened. It was over, they couldn't hurt me anymore, so I just wanted to forget, to live my life. But that kind of thing, it never really goes away, it catches up with you, at the most unexpected times, at the most unexpected things. I'm considering therapy, I have my first appointment next week. And maybe it will help me to understand, to heal. I hope so. Sorry if that bored you. I just wan't you to know that by writing this story you have achieved much more than giving an accurate description of what abuse is like. Your story was able to help me and I can't thank you enough for that.

I don't quite know what to say. I've finished your story and am now sitting speechless without so much as an inkling what I even *should* say...so I'm just typing with the hopes that the right words will write themselves straight from my heart to this page. I have so much respect for you for writing this story. From a critics perspective, this isn't exactly what I'd call cannon, but it is a meaningful use of a high-traffic medium. And I suppose that that is what is important, getting the message out in a way that can and will reach people. I'm in awe of the emotional realism you maintain. For all intents and purposes, this was very real. Emotionally charged stories like this are always so hard to read, but much harder to write. I can't talk from any experience of intense abuse, but I can talk about emotionally traumatic events. I can't write about them in any effective way. I know that I've said this already, but I have *so* much respect for you for writing this. I very grateful that you had the courage to post this. Anyone who gives you shit for it is heartless.

chapter 4:

i forgot to review chapter 3! oh no! anyway, great fic, i hate mustang, and i love poor ed. the scene in the bathroom with the water as hot as possible was sad. mustang is an asshole pedophile, and i hope he dies. oh, wait! HE DOES!! yay!!!!! anyway, great job, but i'm going to stop reviewing so i can keep reading.~

chapter 5:

okay. that was...interesting. i wasn't expecting to see something like that with this mustang, but okay. the bruises ed assumed to be from fighting... i think it's abuse (abuse often breeds more abuse) from his dad.

chapter 6:

mustang must die. poor ed, he's so sad and confused. he just wants to take care of al. this is so sad, but it's so good!

chapter 7:

this is so depressing!! that poor baby! i hate mustang. now he's beating him and he finally raped him. fucking asshole!!! *beats the shit out of mustang* i hate him. HATE him. how dare he??~

I liked your story. It shredded my heart to pieces but I really felt you handled the subject in an accurate and realistic manner. I have to admit, I started reading this story when you first posted it, but i only got through chapter four. Every sentence became a stab at my soul and i couldn't read it not knowing where the story was going. Then my best friend offered to read it for me and once she finished she told me i really should finish it. yet still it has taken me a few weeks to get the courage to finish the damn thing. i just wanted to let you know I appreciated there being a story that showed the progression of abuse and didn't make it seem that someone simply started taking beatings or rape out of the blue.

chapter 2:

oh, ed... the whole time i was waiting for him to bolt, but when i was about six paragraphs from the end, i realized: this is about child abuse. of COURSE he's not going to leave in the first chapter. as far as i can gather so far, he never leaves until he kills mustang. damnit mustang! quit fucking abusing him! i read too many angsty fics... i read one of your others, still incomplete as of now (i think it's yours...) and mustang's an ass there too. anyway!! this was a good chapter, and i look forward to the rest, but it's time for bed. i understood ed's reluctance to say no and his want to have mustang promise to keep it a secret. that was very... 'ed'. and his low self-esteem/body image is very common. most people have body issues, and ed has every reason to have them. he's short, he has prosthetic limbs, and he has scars. but he's beautiful in his ways too. i just wish he knew that. BUT! enough of the emotional-jabber about ed's problems. i just want to say: mustang, keep your perverted, pedophillia hands off of him (even though he won't)! and ed, go home. go home NOW. end of comment. seriously. great chapter, i love your work.~

well, i was going to read something else, but since i only had ten minutes, i figured i would start this. so...
chapter 1:
a very intriguing opening, and i look forward to more tomorow. i really love your style, it seems a lot better than my own... *emo moment* ...anyway!! ^_^ this looks like it will be good, and i'm sure it will! i'll be back soon!~

That was just great. I think it is well writen and original and let me tell you there are hardley any Roy and Ed fanfics that are original. Maybe you can't exactly say it is Roy/Ed but it is good. A+++++++++++ yeah...