rate_review Reviews

Oh...fucking WOW. Man, this story is ABSOLUTELY great...I mean, it's so angst and yet REAL. Great job.

My god, that last chapter was really powerful. It's poignancy just hit me over the head. The emotions were intense and you portrayed Ed's confusion as well as the actual events crazy good. I am thoroughly impressed.

It was for Al. Of course it was for Al... of course it was.

The mind processes here are so rich in detail, so real, so gut-wrenching, heart-rending, and beautiful, and sad...

And on top of it all, you even captured Ed's psyche; he could never do for himself. For himself, he could bear anything. If it was someone he loved, he fought. He fought with everything he had. God damn it. You have truly created a masterpiece.

Bravo.

See? I told you they would be satisfied by the ending! :D *read all the comments for this chapter so far*

I still think the saddest part about this whole chapter is the "Fathers don't do things like that" part of Roy and Ed's conversation. At that moment, they're both hurt little boys, and even though you hate Mustang, you can't help but feel for the man. And Ed, poor Ed who only wanted a parental figure he could trust is so destroyed by realizing that Mustang did care for him, and that Ed DID want Mustang to care for him.

Liike i've said before, i love that you wrote this story and posted it. Thank you for taking the risk.

OMG that was so damn hard to read ... I think I stopped like 5 times.
Poor Ed poor Al I don't even know what to say to this. Your writing is wonderfull...superb even

BUt the story itself is just so heart-wrenching

Well done and I'm looking forward to the prologue *sniff**TEARS**sniff*

chapter 13

through the whole thing, i knew that mustang was going to take it all too far, but i never thought that ed's initial strike against him would be mostly accidental. and yet, that fit in so well with what you were trying to point out. tragic, but beautifully told. you've done some really wonderful work here.

Oh, my God!
I feared this’ld happened, soon or later!!
Can I say a thing, even at the cost to result unpopular?
I really feel sorry for Roy.
Really.
Until the end, I think only “Poor Roy.”
And this is have to do for my love for the character only in part! XD.
I know that from Ed’s part he deserve all of this: the shot, the hits, the hate, everything.
But at the very end, Ed’s found the strength to fight him, in a way.
Roy doesn’t (or so I imagine, I don’t think he killed his father! XD But I hope his father died for a very, very painful disease, anyway). In a sick way Ed fight his demons, Roy makes slime them on: he feel regrets but he’s lost the capacity to fight it. And I think that is because he doesn’t have his negative example and Ed does. I’ll try to explain the best I can (bad English allowing! XD): When Ed wants to do something bad to Alphonse, he thinks to Roy. Thinks: “I don’t wanna be like him, I’m NOT like him”. And if he can to stop it’s only because Roy is alive, Roy’s still doing these things to him. The pain is still fresh. Not for Roy. Roy’s end to be a victim (not at a psychological level, of course, I’m talking of another thing, a more material level). So Roy can’t stops anymore. And I think that now that Roy’s death the risk to hurt Alphonse is very high. The “luck” is that he’s in jail and he can’t do such a thing. And maybe talk to Riza will help, but I sincerely don’t think. In a sick sort of way Ed really needed Roy.
And I’m sad because I’ve had the feeling for all the chapter that Roy’s make shoot himself. I mean, he clearly provoked Ed: a person so careful with word, so clever… He made Ed angry at the point of break. I’m sure of it. Maybe he wanted only weaken Ed, depriving him of intellectual faculties under a wave of anger. Or maybe… But I don’t know. I only know that I feel really sorry for Roy. More than for Ed. This is without doubt one of most wonderful fics I’ve ever read. You’ve built two characters so alive, so human, bad in a sick way, but you can’t really hate them. They’re two victims until the end. Compliments, really, a lot of them! I’ll wait for the last chapter with my heart in hand. A little bit sad, you know? Every Update was a wonderful surprise to me. I hope that with all your school engagement you’ll be able to continue another pair of fics that I personally adore: training Edward Elric and The Game. WONDERFUL WORKS, I admire and envy you a lot!!!!!! *_* Sorry for my grammar mistakes!

*sniff* Poor baby.

Hmm Well. That ending didn't let me down for sure. I haven't got much to say but I am curious about what RizaFromKeron said about Roy knowingly provoking Ed. Although it's difficult to tell, this incident concerned Al for the first time and Roy was treating it like any other incidence perhaps unaware of exactly how important Al and Al's happiness was to Ed. That may be why Roy could've indeliberately provoked him.

Also I love the detail you put into all the emotions and interactions. And part of me is sad for Roy, for how he was indirectly killed as a result of his father's abuse. You've been told this dozens of times but, this is a fantastic story and I, like many others will be waiting with ridiculously elevated levels of anticipation for the final chapter.

P.S. This makes me wonder, how does abuse happen? If its passed from person to person then who started it all and why? And would you possibly have plans for a Roy POV of any of this story's chapters?

I just mutilated the meaning of the first paragraph in my review with the misplacement of "Although it's hard to tell." That was supposed to be put in the last sentence of the paragraph implying that I wasn't 100% sure whether Roy was deliberately provocative or not. I apologise.