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I've been reading this story for a long time, and it took me this long to figure out what I wanted to say. Well, here goes:

Heartbreakingly, painfully, disturbingly accurate.

You paint a very vivid picture with this story. It truly encompasses the damaging (and repetitive) cycle of the prolonged sexual abuse of a child. Ed's struggle to deal with the intense guilt and pain of being a mental and physical rape victim while simultaneously trying to protect Al from himself and Mustang is, well... heartwrending. And your ability to get inside the heads of all the characters involved is amazing, and a little frightening, especially in Ed's case. You make his disjointed and often contradictory feelings and thoughts all too real and easy to understand.

I both love and hate this story at the same time, which is a major nod to your skill as a writer. Many kudos to you, and thank you for writing and posting this story.

I knew it! I knew Al would be involved in some way! As always beautifully written and I love how you capture the after panic of everything. its a classic example and throughly thought out from what I can tell. I wonder how Riza's going to react to any of this..or if anyone is really gonna believe Ed's story

well done! very powerful ...

kiki

again, speechless.ah, well thank you for the explanation. but this chapter...i can't think of anything because I'm er, shocked? All i've bin doing is hand motions , funny faces and jyea during chapter 13. oh jeez its bin 17 minutes since i started this comment.

So it wasn't completely intentional, poor Ed. I had a feeling it might have had something to do with Al. I would definitely be suspicious walking into the office seeing Al sitting on his lap. I think Mustang was a little too sure at that point. He didn't even seem worried that Ed, knowing what he knows, might freak out on him. Oh well, at least now he can't hurt anyone anymore.

Though I find I wonder if something had happened to Mustang when he was younger. He seemed to be indicating something when Ed made the comment about fathers not doing 'that' to their sons. Makes you almost feel sorry for him. Just makes you wish he'd tried harder to stay away from Ed. Even if he had to avoid contact with kids altogether, sort of like what Ed was trying to do with Al. But I guess Ed was somewhat lucky, he had his love for Al keeping him from doing anything he'd regret and hate himself for. He already had enough to hate himself for, though none of it was his fault.

Anyways I just can't wait to see what they'll do with Ed now that they know why he killed Mustang, now that they know what Mustang had been doing to him for so many years. I hope they don't punish him, or at least punish him too badly. He deserves a break and he needs help, and I hope they give him that help. And I hope they don't separate him from Al, they need each other.

Your story certainly captures the plethora of emotions that oocur when a child is hurt that bad...I feel really sad when I read your story but in a (sick?) way relieved that as Mustang died he couldn't hurt Edward/Al anymore.Waiting for your epilogue...I hope it gets wrapped up nicely. Your writing is...amazing!!

-Spirited Dragon
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You have me crying now... You are an amazing writer and I don't know what else I could possibly say. Please write more soon, if you can.
Thank you.

Wow...what can I say or write. Excellant chapter. I think you accurately showed the anguish of an abused child and abuser and their complex relationship. The last confrontation of Ed and Roy was well done. Everything was there: their intricate relationship, their angst, Ed's dependicies-growth-and rebellion. You did a great job. One of the sad parts to this story is that no one seems to know what really happened between Ed and Roy (which Ed would like to keep a secret). Roy still comes across as a good guy. And poor Al will also be haunted. Maybe later Al will start to understand when he is older but who knows. Well done. So sad. So tragic. So real.

This moment right now is the epitome of the sound of silence. There are no words to express the many emotions raging thru me right now. I'm crying, I'm panting, my heart is racing, my hands are shaking, my stomach is in knots. I am an emotional wreck. I was filled with excitement and dread when I got the email notice of a new chapter. I knew what was coming (Roy's death [God it hurts to write that!! T_T]) and was both eager and apprehensive to read the chapter, a chapter that was read with my hands over my mouth while muttering, "Oh my God", over and over and over again. This is a superbly well-written powerful chapter. *sniffle* If you'll excuse me, I need to be alone with a box of tissues for a few moments. *begins to cry for Ed and mourn for Roy*
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Koneko =^.^=

ah, I'm kind of confused about chapter eleven. When Ed accidentally does those things to Al, doesnt he realize what he's doing or is it just one of those lost in thought moments?You have a great consistency of well written chapters though and well...I think you Should really write a book or something of the like because the way you write these events is deep. Thanks for writing it, you're one of the few that have the guts and loyalty to the story to write and finish it. I'm sorry that it's so exhausting for you, its not easy to write about these...experiences. ah, i write like im a grown up hehe. =] Please send me notifications on new updates. Thank you!