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OMG this was so so wonderful. The relationship between the two is so strong and mature. I've slept only 4 hours for the last two days cos this fanfiction is pure genius. My only issue is that what about Major kristoff houser ? He was obviously the man that was going to buy the girls. And since the military got a hold of the list, should he not be punished?

I don't like your story... I LOVED EVER MINUTE OF IT!!!!

hey there! I think this story is also posted on fanfiction.net, but i wasnt sure if it would be a 'cleaner' version, so i stuck to AFF :) I just wanted to say I loved this story and I'm about to start reading the sequel *yay* I saw your myspace and I think I'm gonna add you, if thats ok, lol. I understand if its weird to add avid fans of your stories :) I just wanted to let you know you have a great talent, and I also like the royxwinry pairing! 'specially when you throw ed in like that! It sad...b/c I also favor the edXwinry pairing too....ugh the angst! The dark...sexy...loving man? Or the friendly, adorably-annoying, best friend...that could develop into more? It keeps me on my toes! Well, I do hope this review gave you a little ego-boost to keep you typing out more chapters! [im off to the sequel!]

it's a good start. Not a big roy/winry fan but you managed to get me interested.

I do think you should drop or change the last sentence: Will you come along with me on my inner journey and face it with me? I don’t think I could go over all this again alone. What do you say? Come with me and together we’ll find out just what happened

There's nothing wrong with that kind of ending if the character is talking to someone, but it's made clear that she's currently alone with Mustang... so who is she saying it to?

it's not a big deal for fanfiction, but since you're trying to get a noval publish i just though i should point that out.

OMG!!that was an awsome story. At first i wasn't sure about the whole age thing, but after the second chap i was hooked!I spent i don't know how many hours reading it but I was up till 1am. I look forward to reading more of your work.

Great sotry! I only can say it again! And the ending is very great as well. You did such a good job... I don't know what to say more... o.o

I loved this story! I hope you finish the sequel soon. That was really good ^-^

hey! I've been reading your story for a long time now. And I can only say that you do a really good job. The story is great and I always can imagine that the characters would act like that. I mean the original characters ^^".
I love it and I hope that you can go on soon.
Greetings!

had i been in roy's situation. i would have lit the bastard's hair on fire and let him run around a little and then shoot him. no way in hell would he be aloud to live after what he did.

ok... i just read chapter 19...
oh my god.
that's all i can say, i think.
that had to have been the sexiest encounter so far...
i... i'm just...
i can't wait to read more... not only is this story incredibly sexy and enjoyable, it also has such a fantastic storyline. i know these are things i've said before...
but that last chapter...
...
i need a cold shower.