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by Xellass

person T. Sparrow
schedule November 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
-pets Xel-
Some people are... urg. -.-

You're a fantastic writer, and speedy too! c:
person Xellass
schedule November 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
In response to "Game Kid's WTF comment"

Well, thank you for the enlightening...comment...even if I did have to decode most of it. I've read everything you said (somewhat painfully...I'm not so accustomed to chat/net-speak), and I'm just going to skip down to "logically speaking". ...XD What logic? It's PWP trying to pass as having a plot. Keyword being PWP and trying.

Um, also, he did rip. Or, I'm pretty sure I said he did. I'm not going to ask you to read more carefully, since your eyes seem to have burned already.

Positive depends on your definition of the word. Now it could mean: "OMFG THIS IS SO GREAT", which in this case, it doesn't. But it could also mean, "Okay, so uh, this doesn't make sense can you explain just wtf you're trying to say in here?" Which sounds more like it.

They didn't cut off the review.

Hm, well, in characterization, I suppose it all depends on the writer. I think Kai wouldn't cry - any tears he cries are forced out of him. I don't think he'd cry out of self-pity. He's stronger than that. Or, that's how I think. But we can have a difference of opinions, of course.

...And I left this here in the comments despite my certainty that you'll never come back to check for a response (because if you dislike a fic, isn't NOT returning to burn your eyes some more the smart thing to do?).

signed,
Xel
aka
have a nice day, don't let the door hit you on your way out. ^^

(P.S. Xel does not mean to sound derogatory, condescending, or sarcastic in any way. This response was meant to be a polite and grammatically correct return on a reviewer's skepticism.)
(P.S. If you're taking the story seriously, stop it.)
person WTF
schedule November 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
whooooa- wtfnazz... did u check out the dramatic irony on that?? Tala was like "i'll protect u!!!" and then he like f***z him which is like sayin "muahahaha- by raping u myself!!!!" Like- whoooa there, great protecter u are... Not to mention how could they even f*** him at the end, ya ya the drug made em- but come on, he like got raped or jus painfully f***ed like 4 timez (once tala, once that other guy, once micheal, one ray) and then- after lookin over his sermon and blood caked ass- they do it again- kai screamz, kai cries, kai bleedz- they finish and tala *Specifically* laughz- and they say " : ) wow he lookz soooo happy" : 0 .............. O o;; ... happy?? His sore ass just got another beaten shouldn't it be more then painful by now- shouldn't he have ripped??? o O ................ logically speaking .______. he should probably be locking himself in a closet or sumin... or... dying ... or sumin... is it possible to die from too many f***z?

And... another question... if he never ripped... but he still bled... doesn't that mean there'z internal damage?? Which is like... bad? ... my god- he'll never be able to poop again!!! = O !!! and then he'll get like a kidney stone- and then diiiie a horrible and paaaiiiinful death .____.

...i'm just full of positive feedback huh ^ ^;;

lmao... er.. well... yea- that'z my commentz hope they don't cut off my review for being too long...

and fyi- when he felt tala'z bulge after he was like *cough* RAPED 3 timez, he probably shoulda cried- cause wowy that should make him think it's coming again- not "oh... ur hard? hey- lemme get that for u ^ ^-" -_-;; ... right i'll end it now...

signed
The Game Kid
aka
Wtf ... O o;;....
person kailover2006
schedule November 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
keep updating please i love this story - and a great chapter by the way
person not an angel
schedule November 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i feel so sorry for Kai, yet he's lucky... ok that sounds very weird.. but he gets all the cute guys... :P n
i know i know.. i'm sooooo weird..
person T. Sparrow
schedule November 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Mwahaha!
Do i really have to mention how awesome i think this story and you are? c:
person ryukken
schedule November 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
omfg
that was aweeeeeeesome!
really, i luved it so much i can barely close my mouth O.o i'm still too amazed by it *o*
please update it asap! \o\
congrats!
person Rejii
schedule November 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I LOVE IT!! UKE-KAI! TALA/KAI! GREAT! <3

..they raped poor kai ;_; and they left the door open ;_; who will see him? ;_;

I HOPE Tala beats the hell out of Hitoshi and Michael >(
person Anon
schedule November 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
yay i love kai as an uke, keep writing this is good
person R-chan
schedule November 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Great story!!! *.*
Hot, sexy lemons *drools on the floor* And ..oh Kai.. *sighs* You poor little thing!

I'm in for more! ^____^

BeyBye!
R-chan ^.^
aka Hoshisaki

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