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December 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
...okay, so I don't know what to say; I just spent the last half an hour reading this and it sucked me in! I am in fact wondering what is going to happen...I can't imagine Ed is very happy that his Als have been abducted, and now one of them has been vampirized. Would be good to see his thoughts on that. And I am very interested indeed in what happens between the two Als. Yow, that's hot.
One thing I'll note, your formatting is very hard to read - the paragraphs are running together! If you could put a line break after each character speaks, that would help a LOT, thanks! Also, is there a reason Alfons's name has become Aru? Is that part of being Changed?
One thing I'll note, your formatting is very hard to read - the paragraphs are running together! If you could put a line break after each character speaks, that would help a LOT, thanks! Also, is there a reason Alfons's name has become Aru? Is that part of being Changed?