rate_review Reviews

this was an amazing and disturbing journey. very well written. the emotions you portraid throughout the story were VERY well felt.

thank you so much for sharing your art! and i'm off to read the sequel! :D

This story was amazing. So much suspense & everytime it looked like poor Vegeta would be saved, he ended up back in danger. The ending is tragic, but I've found you started writing a sequel to it on Fanfiction.net. I'm about to start it, hopefully Vegeta won't die this time. This story really did make me think. You're an incredible writer, this is definitely a favorite story. Thank you so much for writing it.

Good job on this darker then what I normally read, but it made me think something. There are actually people out there in Vegeta and Yamcha's role, and suddenly even though I put up with a lot of people's emotional baggage, it suddenly made me realize my life is no where near that bad. I don't know if I should thank you for writing it or be mad, so you know what I'm simply going to congratulate you on pointing out in so many words yes, Life is not fair one bit. Sometimes your the quote bitch and sometimes your the one in charge..

This story is really horrible.
And I don't necessarily mean that in a bad way. But certainly not in a good way either.

It was disgusting gruesome, nauseating, repulsive and so many other things. Yet it was very well written and, despite my disgust with the perpetrators and me feeling the terrible fear and humilation the victim went through right along with him, I just couldn't stop reading.
I must shamefully admit that I'm usually not against reading a bit of torture and upsetting me is not easy, but this story took humilation and non-con to a new level.

I was especially upset about Yamcha. When Vegeta bumped into him on his way to freedom, I honestly belived in a good ending, and somehow I feel that if this had really happend in the DBZ universe, then Yamcha WOULD have helped Vegeta from the beginning. I mean Vegeta must have looked horrible and that alone would have promted a good guy like Yamcha to help him. No matter how much of an asshole Vegeta could be. This was the only moment that seemed a bit OOC for me though. The rest of the story you seemed to stay frighteningly accurate to their Characters. Especially Vegeta.

Due to me being a bit of a pansy I would have wished for a Happy End (however happy this could have ended anyway), but I suppose not every story can End in a happy ever after. Your ending makes me wonder what happens afterwards though? Cause eventually both Vegetas and Yamchas absence has got to be noticed, and surely the others would go looking for them.


Anyway, even though me review seems so negative, I certainly enjoyed reading it and you seem to be a talented author. Is there any chance of you writing other DBZ stories focused on Vegeta in the future? I would really like to read the if you do... though probably not one like this ever again.

I read your fiction in entirety today. You made me cry. This end is so good, but also so much revolting. Horrible even. But I liked this fiction, because as you say it, that shows the cruelty of the man well, than the life is not fair.
That disturbed me XD
Good luck for the future ! :D

Wow. I'm deeply disturbed, intrigued, and my mind is running a mile a minute. You couldn't have described the horrors of human nature more beautifully (in a kind of sick, perverse way). What I would really like is a sequel, but I don't know if that'll be happening anytime soon, or at all. Cheers!

Gah, I shoulda known there wasn't gonna be a happy ending. :( haha. But! I did indeed step out of my shell. Envisioning everything that you wrote out... you weren't overly detailing things but you made a clear picture to show exactly what was happening. It's like, as I read along, I could literally daydream and see what was happening. (daynightmare? lol)

The character development was huge. Though I suppose I'm probably not the only reader/reviewer that would like a sequel... with less violence (still violence, but less), and more love. And sex? Lots of sex. I enjoy that. But some love, too. But, you're the author, it's your call, as readers we can only be thankful with what we're given, haha.

Hmmm... on that note, I bid you, and your story, good night. I truly did enjoy this.

♥
Camui

i did enjoy it ... hoping for something a little happier but I think I prefer this ending over a happy ending

Wow. I definitely didn't expect that ending, but I like it--it's shocking and unsettling. Great story, can't wait to see what you write next!

Well, I like this.I didn't want they killed Vegeta...That hurt.But the ideas in the ending ... they're very good.They are the obverse(?) of the ideas from the beginning. It was clever