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October 18, 2009 at 12:00 AM
aaaahh i can't wait for more! poor vegeta, that last chapter was intense. i hope they get out of there safely and that vegeta can forgive yamcha!
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October 12, 2009 at 12:00 AM
This story is friggin' crazy! And it's different than anything I've ever read before, I love it! I can practically feel the humiliation and shame pooring from Vegeta. I pity him to no end. Now I pity him even more because he has to rely on Yamcha. Well, maybe not so much in Yamcha as he does in himself, but still...he's like a glimmer of hope. Except Yamcha's such a paranoid coward, things seem hopeless right now. If he was strong or fast enough as Goku or Krillin, then couldn't he quickly snatch the remote and two guns from those weaklings? They're so slow and stupid, they wouldn't know what would be happening. Huh, I'm starting to sound a little like Vegeta. ^^; Except he's more smarter in what's going on.
Your writing is also very detailed, especially with this plot. I don't see how you can do it. In some parts of the story, I almost question myself if I can read on or not. But I do because, of course, I'm curious to see what happens. When Vegeta escaped, that gave me much hope (though I bet it gave everyone hope), I actually thought he was going to get away. But then they were chasing after him and all, I just had a feeling that you weren't going to let that happen. Let's see...I've been thinking that if Yamcha has sex with him, then he would fall for Vegeta instead of Skip. Hehe, Skip. He seems way too far gone to even know what his plans are right now. Let alone them even making sense. Well anyways, it's a brutal story, and it opens my eyes more to the real world. I've also been very excited to see that you updated more quickly. When I read this before, I thought you might've abandoned this story. But I see now that that's not the case. Good luck with this one, and I hope you keep getting good inspiration in writing this story. I'm in total suspense now.
Your writing is also very detailed, especially with this plot. I don't see how you can do it. In some parts of the story, I almost question myself if I can read on or not. But I do because, of course, I'm curious to see what happens. When Vegeta escaped, that gave me much hope (though I bet it gave everyone hope), I actually thought he was going to get away. But then they were chasing after him and all, I just had a feeling that you weren't going to let that happen. Let's see...I've been thinking that if Yamcha has sex with him, then he would fall for Vegeta instead of Skip. Hehe, Skip. He seems way too far gone to even know what his plans are right now. Let alone them even making sense. Well anyways, it's a brutal story, and it opens my eyes more to the real world. I've also been very excited to see that you updated more quickly. When I read this before, I thought you might've abandoned this story. But I see now that that's not the case. Good luck with this one, and I hope you keep getting good inspiration in writing this story. I'm in total suspense now.
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October 12, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Le gasp! I cannot stop here! However it is amazing story, you want to pity Vegeta but yet those last words kind of hit a note. I like the fact that the characters can be real in some sort of situation. Its just sad really what humans do to people.
Wonderful story! I do hope you continue! ^^
Wonderful story! I do hope you continue! ^^
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October 11, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I've been following this story since May--I absolutely love your writing! This story is unlike anything I've ever read, I can't wait for the next chapter!
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October 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Still on the edge of my seat. Update as quickly as you can, please!!
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October 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Oh, what a quick update!
I love your style highly descriptive and detailed ... almost feel may be witnessing the scene itself.
And Yamcha is in character!
For a moment I thought his behavior was to give a turn to be very determined or smart. ( the hero behavior, you know)
I'll have more trust in you ^^
I love your style highly descriptive and detailed ... almost feel may be witnessing the scene itself.
And Yamcha is in character!
For a moment I thought his behavior was to give a turn to be very determined or smart. ( the hero behavior, you know)
I'll have more trust in you ^^
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October 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Every week I can’t wait for the weekend to come … and this is not because then I have a rest from my studies and work, or get more sleep, or have fun going out. Well, I enjoy all of these things, but it is the updates of your exceptional story which really complete my weekend. (I am not new to this story and have followed it for approx. half a year and there have been sad times when you have not updated for long ;))
Admittedly, “I Hate Being Right” is quite disturbing (even if one judges by the standards of adultfanfiction.net, it is definitely the most dark and truly scary piece of work), but if the readers are not intimidated by the contents, they get fascinated both by your talent for story-telling and your writing skills.
I won’t lie, the plot of your story is very twisted and the first time I read it (it was around 7 chapters long back then) it made my flesh creep. But I was captivated by your writing for it is less the contents themselves which are so striking, but your way to depict the action vividly in some beautifully detailed manner and make it feel real. After every chapter I had read, I thought it could impossibly get any more frightening, but against all my expectations it did and I loved it.
I loved the way you create the dreary atmosphere in the first chapters, thus setting the air for the whole story. You have an eye for details, which helps to produce what I would call a "3D feeling". It is impressive how you use dialogue, lighting and sound all at once to establish the setting and to convey to your readers the impression of being observers. Wonderful!
The development of the storyline is remarkable, the more so because you succeed in creating real tension within a quite pornographic plot without this tension being based upon the question of who is going to fuck whom or how they are going to make out or whether they are going to do it at all in the next chapter.
I like your writing style very much. I have enjoyed every dialogue you have written so far in this story and I wonder how you manage to make the characters sound so authentic. Thank you for keeping all of them in character :)
Thumbs up for your work! Do not let us all wait too long for a new update, please.
Admittedly, “I Hate Being Right” is quite disturbing (even if one judges by the standards of adultfanfiction.net, it is definitely the most dark and truly scary piece of work), but if the readers are not intimidated by the contents, they get fascinated both by your talent for story-telling and your writing skills.
I won’t lie, the plot of your story is very twisted and the first time I read it (it was around 7 chapters long back then) it made my flesh creep. But I was captivated by your writing for it is less the contents themselves which are so striking, but your way to depict the action vividly in some beautifully detailed manner and make it feel real. After every chapter I had read, I thought it could impossibly get any more frightening, but against all my expectations it did and I loved it.
I loved the way you create the dreary atmosphere in the first chapters, thus setting the air for the whole story. You have an eye for details, which helps to produce what I would call a "3D feeling". It is impressive how you use dialogue, lighting and sound all at once to establish the setting and to convey to your readers the impression of being observers. Wonderful!
The development of the storyline is remarkable, the more so because you succeed in creating real tension within a quite pornographic plot without this tension being based upon the question of who is going to fuck whom or how they are going to make out or whether they are going to do it at all in the next chapter.
I like your writing style very much. I have enjoyed every dialogue you have written so far in this story and I wonder how you manage to make the characters sound so authentic. Thank you for keeping all of them in character :)
Thumbs up for your work! Do not let us all wait too long for a new update, please.
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October 8, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I love this story. I cannot what for you to go on with it.
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October 6, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Disturbing & interesting story.
Poor Vegeta, besides having to rely Yamcha,it seems that these men have don't had enough with him yet.
Poor Vegeta, besides having to rely Yamcha,it seems that these men have don't had enough with him yet.
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October 5, 2009 at 12:00 AM
CANNOT WAIT FOR THE NEXT CHAPTER!! I'm on the edge of my chair now....don't let me wait long, please!!!