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April 30, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Poor Vegeta....Oh well,can't say that he doesn't deserve it. i really love the plot, It's very organized. Keep on writing!
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April 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Please update.....i was enjoying this story sooo much
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March 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Deliciously evil and very well written, best story actively being worked on in this section. The appetizer was wonderful, Ill be waiting with great interest for the main coarse.
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March 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Please update!!!! This is a great story!!! I LVOE IT!!!
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February 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
You are an awesome writer! I love this story. I hope you keep updating. It's really good
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December 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Yup that's some graphic stuff. At first I wasn't going to read it because I saw N/C and V/Y and I love that pairing so much but not in that forced violent way, but I broke down and read it anyway. I'm glad I did I can't wait to see where this goes, update as soon as you can.
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December 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
it was really Good! please Update soon!!
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December 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow. I truely feel bad for Vegeta in this chapter and they really havent done anything yet! I hope that you will reveal just who these humans are. Next chapter, please. XD
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December 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
THAT..WAS...AMAZING!!! I need more *Rocks back and forth in corner*
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December 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hi B here. I have to admit when I got home from work today I was "really" hoping there would be another chapter of this. Your writing style if very descriptive and clear, it's not hard at all to visualize what's going on. You have a captivating mix of emotions to your plot. I could feel Vegeta's frustration and anger while he tried to defend his race.
I felt a bit of anger at Bulma for agreeing with Yamacha and cuddling with the scared bandits in front of Vegeta (those two weren't on very good terms with each other at this time, I believe), she seemed uncaring and, well; weak-willed. I prefer Bulma portrayed as a strong character, I thought she was lacking in her brief moments in this fic. I see her as the one who’d ask the most questions and say all the thinks that would ruffle Vegeta's fur (so to speak). But, then again his is not a VXB and you probably want to focus more on the main characters, which I can understand.
There was a good dose of humor in this story so far too. The human's questioning of Vegeta and his "Tong" was quite humorous. I find the small details are the funniest to read and write. The thought of Vegeta having such a streak of modesty and blushing, he'd be so humiliated; and all us Vegeta fans just love to torture and embarrass our monkey prince, I can't say just way. Morbid sense of humor maybe? (Actually that writer “Rich” seemed a lot like a rabid fan girl, I like that he’s a guy thou. It’d be too much of a self-insertion other wise)
The one main point that really has me interested is Yamacha. Is he going to end up an evil human or a good human? I can easily see him going both ways. Is he the one torturing our prince or will he be the one that saves him? Yamacha and Vegeta's conversation in the first chapter really has me thinking on his one. Yamacha seem sincere when he said he wanted to show Vegeta how good humans were, I didn't feel any hinting of a grudge towards the saiyan prince from him; and usually authors love to throw foreshadowing in when they can.
Anyway I'll be waiting impatiently to see where this goes. Hell I might end up writing a new story because of his; it makes those rusty gears in my head turn. Hmmmm....
Okay now for the cliché review.
Liked, loved, want some more of it.
Saiyanb AKA b-chan
I felt a bit of anger at Bulma for agreeing with Yamacha and cuddling with the scared bandits in front of Vegeta (those two weren't on very good terms with each other at this time, I believe), she seemed uncaring and, well; weak-willed. I prefer Bulma portrayed as a strong character, I thought she was lacking in her brief moments in this fic. I see her as the one who’d ask the most questions and say all the thinks that would ruffle Vegeta's fur (so to speak). But, then again his is not a VXB and you probably want to focus more on the main characters, which I can understand.
There was a good dose of humor in this story so far too. The human's questioning of Vegeta and his "Tong" was quite humorous. I find the small details are the funniest to read and write. The thought of Vegeta having such a streak of modesty and blushing, he'd be so humiliated; and all us Vegeta fans just love to torture and embarrass our monkey prince, I can't say just way. Morbid sense of humor maybe? (Actually that writer “Rich” seemed a lot like a rabid fan girl, I like that he’s a guy thou. It’d be too much of a self-insertion other wise)
The one main point that really has me interested is Yamacha. Is he going to end up an evil human or a good human? I can easily see him going both ways. Is he the one torturing our prince or will he be the one that saves him? Yamacha and Vegeta's conversation in the first chapter really has me thinking on his one. Yamacha seem sincere when he said he wanted to show Vegeta how good humans were, I didn't feel any hinting of a grudge towards the saiyan prince from him; and usually authors love to throw foreshadowing in when they can.
Anyway I'll be waiting impatiently to see where this goes. Hell I might end up writing a new story because of his; it makes those rusty gears in my head turn. Hmmmm....
Okay now for the cliché review.
Liked, loved, want some more of it.
Saiyanb AKA b-chan