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Wow...amazing chapter! I love how you can make simple dialogues and casual converstaions so entertaining and deep. "He had his own ideas about what meditation was supposed to entail, and something about this offended him…greatly." I really loved that line. Vegeta, the ruthless, cold-blooded killer truly does have a soft and easily hurt side to him, and I think the whole tree thing was amazingly written. I think this whole chapter was amazingly written and I love the relationship between Bra and Vegeta! So good. She's so cute and sweet, yet clever, smart, and curious, and I love that. The thing I really like about this whole story is how great of a dad Vegeta is to his daughter. He loves her, hugs her, and converses with her like a normal loving father. Then he runs into Goku and it's all suddenly back to the old, wild, seemingly out of control Vegeta that we're so used to. His drives are maddening and I love how you make him such a believable and round character. There truly are many different plots and character changes in this story and it makes me even more anxious to read future chapters and see how the characters develop, Vegeta especially. So...awesome chapter, great writings, I love it!

Just thought I'd stop by and leave a new and improved opinion.
I like it. =)
So nevermind whatever the hell it was I was grumbling about before, keep it up!
And this new tail should put an interesting spin on things. I'm very glad you've brought Vegeta back into the story, now we can look at their twisted "relationship" some more.
Hopefully you'll see fit to add another chapter sometime soon, I'll be looking forward to it.
^^

Chapter 6

This chapter is a nice change of scenery. The point of view really shows Vegeta's other side. Also I liked how we get to see the close friendship between Goten and Trunks.

I look forward to the next chapter. Great job to you and your beta. :)

Wow...really nice chapter. I like how you look into Goten and Trunks's relationship. I like how we get to see Goku's lack of parenting and its affects on Goten. It really hasn't been fair that the boy hasn't had a father for most of his life and the show, as well as many fanfictions, tend to overlook that. Good thing Trunks is a good friend to him.

I LOVED the whole Bra/Vegeta relationship there. She...is SO cute...and you make her have her own special powers that make her such an interesting character. And Vegeta is so adorable with her. AWWWW! I loved the carrier that he puts on his back for her. I think his reactions to the unfamiliar warmth on his back is so...ah...I don't know, cute, sweet, and moving. Cute, insightful chapter. I love it.

More! More, please, for the love of god write more!

That was an amazing chapter - steps taken forwards and backwards and more questions raised. I like the way you're showing subtle changes in character; it feels very natural rather than being forced. The very last scene may have been short, but I think I liked it best for the way their characters were suddenly reversed and the way Vegeta was almost feeling actual joy for a minute there.

Excellent! This chapter was so suspenseful. When Vegeta yelled out Repent, my heart almost leapt out of my chest! I'm interested in Vegeta's sudden change of attitude. His confusion toward the "goodness" he's feeling if very intriguing. I also loved how he wanted all the pain, as if he felt for guilty "disappointing" those around him. So much angst! And now he has his tail back! I'm very excited. I'l be anxiously awaiting the next chapter. :)

I really really liked it! Pleeease continue! I want to see Veggie-chan chained up and not able to break himself free *smirks* Ooh, he'll get SO mad when he finds out!

Um... No.
This is not at all as exciting as I thought it would be.
Spiral far surpassed this.
Do you really think anyone gives a flying fuck about your weird little village in the jungle?
What is it's purpose?
Why am I supposed to care? Am I?
Make this stupid jungle go away. Bring it back to where we all want it.

Chloe,

Your impatience has been duly noted. However, it will have no bearing on the outcome of this story.

Macha