rate_review Reviews

i like it it has a good plot , your way better than i am ...lol i didnt even get a scene done when i wanted to write one ..lol so congrats , i really likes it

ooooOOOOOOOooooooooohhhhhhhh my that brought back memories thank you now we both have to see if we can find our collars and supprise our mates tommorow *snicker* have a good one

Affie and Rysha

hot

that was awesome. *nomme gives trulywished a standing O* don't worry, just something my insane friends at university do :P this was totally hot, but the way ed was so frightened had me worried. of course i should have known that things would be different than my warped little imaginings in the end.

i can't wait till your next work!

I liked it. I thought it was really yummy. *chuckles* I'm not really much into spanking, but you really sparked my interest. I really liked how Roy said something like how he thought Ed did it on purpose because he was sure Ed liked it.

Grammar and spelling wise, it looked pretty good, although there was one typo on the biginning of the fifth paragraph that totally jumped out at me. This is what you have: He was jerked back to pressed against the strong

Other than that, the spelling and grammar was good. ^___^

I'd leave you a longer review, but my laptop is about to die. T_T Again, nice story.

- Z

*DED*

that was......just....*guh*
spanking! omg yes! so wonderful.

well, you've really done it, that managed to be hot, dirty, and fucking ADORABLE all at once. it was really perfect D/s fantasy, and now i am composed soley of love for it
*mmmm*

-??

That was hot!

*_* Roy was whipping Ed for being a bad boy. DSFARGAG. That was so, so very tasty.