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September 9, 2011 at 12:00 AM
A man can some one find the author and make him write the rest of the story.
This one is really good its a shame that is not finished.
I like how you made Bulma strong and how even Frieza is no match for her and her origin was nicely described so everything falls in to place.
The Vegeta looks good and maybe little calmer the in other story's and that is kinda good in my opinion.
The only thing that i can say that i was kinda disappointing to some extend was that you didn't maintain that atmosphere form the first chapter where Bulma is mysterious, dangerous, and bold and everyone fear her including the vegeta here. Now that would be really good. the second and third chapter was starting to go way to much in to common flow of the story's if possible (as much as how unlikely)to go on in darker shade as the first one giving it much more serious level of story telling.
well in any-cease if the author is still online somewhere it would be nice surprise to see continuation of this story i know the chances are less then zero at this point... but cant blame me for trying right... XD
so I wish you best of luck and good Writing from ZeroUnit
PS:if someone by any chance know that this story is still going somewhere else can you some how let me know thank in advance. ^^
This one is really good its a shame that is not finished.
I like how you made Bulma strong and how even Frieza is no match for her and her origin was nicely described so everything falls in to place.
The Vegeta looks good and maybe little calmer the in other story's and that is kinda good in my opinion.
The only thing that i can say that i was kinda disappointing to some extend was that you didn't maintain that atmosphere form the first chapter where Bulma is mysterious, dangerous, and bold and everyone fear her including the vegeta here. Now that would be really good. the second and third chapter was starting to go way to much in to common flow of the story's if possible (as much as how unlikely)to go on in darker shade as the first one giving it much more serious level of story telling.
well in any-cease if the author is still online somewhere it would be nice surprise to see continuation of this story i know the chances are less then zero at this point... but cant blame me for trying right... XD
so I wish you best of luck and good Writing from ZeroUnit
PS:if someone by any chance know that this story is still going somewhere else can you some how let me know thank in advance. ^^
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January 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Well well well, certainly odd, but interestingly inticing. I'd like to see more when yuo get around to it, I can't help but wonder how this thing could progress. For now, this is CrazyIvan, living and let die, semper phi, carry on...
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December 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
interesting. looking forward to the next chapter.
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December 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
please! please! write more, this is good! I know it will keep on getting better.
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December 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This looks like the beginning of a very interesting read, keep up the good work!
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December 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Sweet, What a beginning of a good story, I hope to see more chapters soon.
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December 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
That was good please continue.