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for For Her. For Him.

by nomdeplume

person ursweetheartles
schedule January 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
geez, way to throw the agnst and depression in there in that last sentance. It was so amusing and fluffy then *bam* teehee, but its great, keep up teh good work :D
person Hikaru!
schedule January 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Aw... poor Ed. The ending line was just so sad. I love that you brought in Havoc, Breda, and Fuery to spy on the Colonel. I can so see them doing that! Can't wait for more!
schedule January 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
The end was so sweet! *wibbles* I love the way that they are slowly, so slowly, falling in love. ^__^ *glomps roy & ed* they needs more luvin! ^__^ Beautiful job so far! More! More! XD
person milky
schedule January 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hmm, I do like the reactions from the people around them, considering Ed is very youthful AND knocked up - even if he's passing, there are indeed gonna be some stares XD Hopefully they make it home in one piece!
person Hikaru!
schedule January 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Woot! the date begins! But who is the unseen observer...? Find out next time! On DRAGON BALL Z!!!

Ahem, sorry... eheheh...

Really like what you've done with the date so far. Poor Ed must feel so conflicted, on one hand, he's been fantasizing about Mustang, on the other... he's being treated like a GIRL!! Lol.

Loved the bit about the girl's bathroom! Another detail that just adds to the story that most people wouldn't think about TO add.
person Kasarin
schedule January 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh crap ­>< Who saw them? It sounded like he/she seemed to have noticed that Ed wasn't a girl! >< I hope I'm paranoid *looks around* Roy's gestures are cute, he can be such a gentleman when he wants to be. Though, if I were a guy, I'd pity Ed. I really would. But you can't help but chuckle a little at the way you write these things. I like how Ed whispered "Screw you" to him XD Ed can't help but be Ed. Awesome work as usual!
schedule January 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Aww, that's so sweet. Of course, maybe taking Ed to a place where Roy's so well known might not have been the best idea.
person ursweetheartles
schedule January 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
the sceane you set is nice, as always, and i enjoy the fact that ed has to gripe and gripe about going on the date then *poof* he's there and hes great with it. do i smeel denial? mmm that can only mean one of two things: slow, intricate plot or suprise!sex :p

keep up the awesome writing! <3
person Nomme de Plume
schedule January 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
that was absolutely adorable. but i have to wonder who their unseen observer was. i don't exactly pay attention to eye color, unless it's really obvious like ed's or naruto's, but i found myself praying that it wasn't archer. i figured with the nonchalant way the observer kept thinnking of roy as the colonel that maybe it was havoc, but i guess i'll just have to wait and find out, ne? i just don't want trouble for those two *pouts*

again, great chapter, i can't wait for your next update!!
person Artemis
schedule January 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
aaawwww so cute...^^ update soon

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