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I'm diggin this story alot and i'm glad you wrote several chapters so quickly. About the babies' names though, whoever it was, saying that naming them Maes and Riza was lame was in turn, retarded. I mean, pls, it's logical the guy would want to name them after the two ppl he cherished. Doesn't matter if it's corny or not. It makes SENSE. Anyway, you do what you do. Update soon!

This is really good. You chose a very creative way to do an mpreg, plus the rest of the plot is interesting. Ed's mood swings are funny and touching at the same time. I look forward to the next update.

^_^ Your writing is improving. I was going to say something about your dialogue but you fixed it yourself and I wanna hug you for it.
This is a very interesting story, I've enjoyed it a lot. Please continue.

Ahahaha, poor Ed - caught between a noisy couple and a hard place, as it were. And I am really really curious to see what's going to happen with Wrath!! And LOVE for the recognition that Al wasn't really mad at Ed, and that Ed knew that. The two are far closer than that - Al was just away taking care of business. Excellent!

Love! Love! how fast your updating...are you a machine?!! You must have this already writen!! I don't care I love it XD

watch out for your use of " " at the begining and ending of a convertation bit, and sometimes if you break it up...you forget to singal the return to talking by adding the quotes.

kiki

Yay, new chapter! As far as names go, they're your babies, you can call them anything you want to. Though I personally prefer coming up with new names, but it is up to you. I like Riza and Maes too.

ooo teh mystery! teh angst! teh ... seperation? oh noes boys! stay safe, and make it back to each other soooooon :P
*big fic love*

...er... i didn't mean to insult you.. I'm sorry! I try to offer concrit at times but..um.. i have no tact. Please don't be angry. That's why i typically lurk and don't leave reviews, cuz stuff i say could be taken the wrong way when i really don't mean it to be mean.

I really do like the story, and i'm amazed that you update so quickly. I especially liked the scene on the train, living in an apartment, i can sympathize with Ed... like when the people next door are having 'giggle sex' in the bathtub... ugh, it's so unzesty...

The little line about the guy not lasting very long and that probably being why the girl was so quiet was AWESOME! I laughed. I was thinking that, and then you said it, and it just made the whole scene perfect.

So um... please don't be mad at me, i didn't mean anything by it!!! *bows in supplication*

I think naming the twins Maes and Riza is perfectly fine; but if you feel the need to change the names, go right ahead! This is, after all, YOUR story, not the readers'. We are merely bystanders.

Good chapter! I feel like we're seeing a little more into Ed's mind right now, which is cool. Cheers!

Hm. It looks like there is something missing in the middle. I think you need to check the formatting or the coding because there is a huge skip in the conversation, going from Ed talking to Havoc to Ed talking to Al on the phone and it is quite confusing.
And I am most curious now- when Ed and Roy finally get around to having sex, ah, which hole will they use? The new "exit" for the babies- is it functional?
And, um...
Will Ed breast feed?