rate_review Reviews

Hehehe, I think the begining of this chpater was my favorite... the whole blatter explosion thing. yes, I agree the Korinto must have a pair of hooker boots... mine are better... This chapter was fairly intertaining. Kakkarot being all paranoid of death is kinda funny. I guess I've been playing a scenario in my head where he gets all twitchy and looks everywhere with each step, but then again it's me so you can't be suprised. I don't know where it came from, because he wasn't like that in the story, I suppose its from one of my american shows.
Anywho, the hunting thing is getting very interesting. Ican see Kakkorat with dozens of bodies all around him for the one they originaly killed, but I know thats the case. Wow, this whole review has been a giant ramble.

Good job on the chapter... kepp your characters boots shiny and have a great day.

Vegeta being an ass is what I love about him, so I suppose my using it almost as a complain WAS kinda silly. ^-^ Not so much Velari in this chapter, but I love the bodyguard! That's probably one of the things I love the most about your stories; I don't hate your original characters, they're all fabulous.
Another great chapter, and I can't wait to see how things go once Kakarot is completely sober again ^-^

~~Asha

Man, Goku has some major guts in this story, i think it's gonna take a bit for me to get used to but i like it no less. I thinks it''s pretty amazing hw you've pulled him away from that and made Vegeta still such an asshole if not more of an asshole than usual. This story is so confusing to me and the only character i actually like is Velari, for the moment, that's crazy! you're awesome and i can't wait to clear up some of the many questions that i have later on. I cannot wiat for the next chapter- awesome!

You are right. I did recognize some similar aspects of your writing in this story. As well as things that are the same. Especially the currency they use in this story is the same. :p

Chapter 2

Kakarott is definitely a rascal in this one, with a little encouragement from that guard. And when he got back to the castle and socked Prince Vegeta in the face...that was great! I look forward to more of this story. :D Keep it coming.

Wow that came completely out of the blue for me. I wasn't expecting that type of answer from the guard. I liked it though. ^_^ And the heat complication sure is interesting. That was another twist I wasn't expecting either. Great job and hopefully your beta can finish checking another chapter super soon!

Hehehe, I think you're starting to change my opinion of Goku...erm Kakorat... watever. I like the sarcastic carefree personality you have going for him... but he was in a bad mood so we'll see. YOu have Bardock as one of the pairing hints... so I hope we'll get to see a lot more of him. Korinto is probly my favorite character thus far, but we still have a whole story to go through. I'm glad the caffiene is finaly giving some use to you, god knows it might help with the tech class... hehehe. Keep up the good work... of sitting there and letting your beta do the work, well you did write the story, so I guess ummm have fun posting! thanks for favor and have a great day!

Oh you absolutely MUST get another chapter out as soon as possible! This story is fantastic straight from the beinning! Can't wait for the next installment!

I love where this story is going, it seems perfect. Oh, got my computer fixed for free so be expecting stuff from me! Anyways, I love the plot and how you set up the mating sequence and all. You've managed to captivate me yet again my friend. Talk to you soon.

~Guice

Hm...I like where this id going...Update soon!

ooh...nice beginning. So far Vegeta seems like an ass, but I like Velari. I hope he continues to be as likeable as most of your original characters. ^-^ keep your Beta moving, I look forward to reading more of this!