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for Oceans

by Salza

person CrimsonTide
schedule April 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Man, you are SO good! Your writing is so flawless and so flowing that picturing it in my head is just as easy as if I were watching it on tv.... and that's a hot thought ^.^

I was wondering when you were going to update this fic, and it was certainly worth the wait! Fantastic! This has quickly become one of my favorite fics, and you have become one of my favorite writers.

I look forward to more ^.^
schedule April 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh wow...this was exquisite! It was so tasteful, but still detailed and alluring. Really awesomely written! I can't wait for the update; Piccolo and Goku need to sort their feelings out for each other and not regret anything!!!

LATER. ROGUEFURY
person Robyn
schedule March 31, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This is going to hurt you more than it does me.


*SPORK*
person nahleili
schedule March 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh man, I seriously love how you write Piccolo. This fic is excellent. Do continue soon :)
person FireFly1
schedule March 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I think you're doing a wonderful job with this fic ^.^ You're keeping both Goku and Piccolo in character pretty well. Goku isn't overly dominant and Piccolo isn't being meek and submissive, even though he lacks experience.

Nothing ruins a fic faster than OOC characters in my opinion.

I can't wait for the next chapter!
schedule March 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I LOVE this story. Such a perfect look into Piccolo's head, with that strange mix of confidence and awkwardness. The description in chapter 3 is wonderful, and for me, the strange chain of events is completely believable. Goku's automatic treatment of Piccolo as a friend and a lover suits him - he can read Piccolo and knows more about him than Piccolo realizes. Bravo. I can't wait for more.
person Robyn
schedule March 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Took a chance on a pairing I don't usually read. The first chapter was ABSOLUTELY AMAZING. I loved the description of Piccolo trying to get out of the ocean, and the introspect of him thinking about all of those around them, and examining how they were reacting, and trying to figure out how he should be reacting.

Wow...on to chapter 2.
person Robyn
schedule March 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapter two was a great moment of awkwardness. I loved it! :)
schedule March 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
OMFG!! This is exquisite! I love the writing and the dialogue so much. The intricacy of how you're writing the point of view is soo damned sexy! I really hope you update soon, cuz this is the best fic I've read in a while! PLEASE UPDATE SOON!

LATER. ROGUEFURY
person Robyn
schedule March 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
*sighs* Spectacluar. :) You have a gift, that's for certain, and I hope to see more of it soon!

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