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February 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh WOW! This is superbe!! Perfect characterization, and it stays true to DBZ! You are a phenomenal writer!! Please continue!!
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January 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I want more! This story is beautifully written; flawless! They're both in perfect char, but the situation is still believable. I am loving this story so far, so I hope you review soon!
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January 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
What a great start - nice description and a good grasp on a Piccolo mindset. (The only phrase that bobbled a bit was 'air freshener'.) I like how Piccolo doesn't really understand his own motivation for saving Goku, as well as the difference in his reaction to Gohan. I look forward to seeing what you do with this.
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January 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh Noes, I can leave a reply now.
First of all, you polished this VERY nicely. I love what you've done. I'm really beginning to get into this pairing, thanks to you. The imagery is beautiful and of course... It just makes me wanna pull out my old VHS and go through the tapes watching this saga just for the subtext.
Very well done. ^_^
First of all, you polished this VERY nicely. I love what you've done. I'm really beginning to get into this pairing, thanks to you. The imagery is beautiful and of course... It just makes me wanna pull out my old VHS and go through the tapes watching this saga just for the subtext.
Very well done. ^_^