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Squeals, this good, really good in fact! Okay, so you have some spelling and grammatical errors, but those're always quite easy to fix. And if you're unsure on how to spell a word then just google it! Now about the fic, so if this is an AU, I'm wonderin' something: It seems to take place in modern day, right, and you've written twice that Edward has his automail (the arm) and then when you wrote about the automail thingy I got a bit confused, cos if it's set in modern Japan then why does Edward've his automail, huh? Oh, well, it just confused me that's all!

Anyway, I really think the plotline is great as well as the description of the characters, even though Edward seems to be a little out off topic! And Envy is just so great, one of my favourite characters along with Edward, of course and the best pairing there is according to me at least, haha!

Cannot wait to read more, so please update soon...

for the lov of god please UPDATE!!!!!!!!

Please update this soon

There are a few things I am wondering about. You wrote that Roy and his people are the good guys...does this mean they are working for the government/military? Why were they at the hospital...was someone inside the original person who was going to be the one to go on a mission at the Devil's nest and Ed just came at the wrong time? Is Ed being abused for some greater good that Roy and his people think they are doing? (If so..still is wrong.) Ed does not seem to be his usual self in this story. He should have bit down when giving Mustang his blow job. Is the object at the Devil's Nest the philospher's stone? A few grammatical errors but the more you write the more you learn. Please update...would love to see Ed save himself and to see what direction you take this.

O.o Wow an up-date!
~happy~
please continue!
~waves the 'we want more envy/ed/greed' banner with a smile~
ja!

hmmm i cant really enjoy it cause i feel kind of lost as to what is going on and why. Hopefully subsequent chapters shall shed some light

omgomgomgomg!
please update soon *watches*

((looks at the end of the page and bursts into tears!)) It was just getting to Envy as well! Soooo cruel!
Can we look forward to an up-date some time soon please?

Looks good, very interesting. Keep it up!

AAAAAHHHHHHHH BAD ENVY!! BAD ENVY!! keep your dirty hands to yourself >.< *is gripped*