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February 21, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I loved it as usual lol!
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September 27, 2010 at 12:00 AM
-blush- oh my that was hot!
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August 31, 2010 at 12:00 AM
okay LOVE this story! totally fucking hot hun, totally HOT!!!! i'm a total sucker for 'first time' stories >.< *drool*
keep on writing, (PLEASE!!)
luv-blonde-bunny
keep on writing, (PLEASE!!)
luv-blonde-bunny
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September 25, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I'm glad I searched for you here because this definitely wasn't on ff.net. I loved this story! I wanted to know how old Gohan was though, cuz I was picturing him like around the android saga. I also liked how Goku told him that it was wrong and that he should get married and have children later, I thought that was kind of sweet. No ChiChi bashing in this one I guess! Haha :)
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August 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
WAIT ........who would DARE give flames i mean really i love ALL your writing lol its so detailed and nice thanks!!!! kinda sad but thanks!!!
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August 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Normally I do not like shouta but this was so well written I couldn't stop reading. I felt Gohan's pain and I just loved the way they connected. I couldn't get into the sex scene just because it's with a little kid, but I still enjoyed it a lot. The premise of this story was a really good one. Well written Soncest is such a pleasure when you find one :D
Great, great job once again.
Great, great job once again.
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March 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow, as much as I'd like to deny it, Goku is absolutely right:“Oh my god, Gohan! So fucking hot!” XD *laugh*
It's very reassuring to see that I'm not the only one who's fascinated with unprobable, hot, yaoi incest pairings. *grin*
I really, REALLY liked the way you wrote that blowjob xD Usually I hate those 'cause the one giving them doesn't get anything out of it, but in your story... xD Well, let's just say it was disturbingly cute and hotter than it had any right to be. Oh, and I laughed my ass off at Gohan's line XD "Mom did that too? I thought I made that up or something." Hilarious!
I also liked the fact that Goku had so many doubts and tried to get Gohan to go away and forget about everything. I don't like stories where a character that's usually so good and full of morals suddenly turns around and sleeps with his son, telling him that everything is alright and Daddy just wants to play or shit like that. You showed that he's deeply conflicted and not happy about what's happening.
I'd REALLY(as in "falling to my knees and begging you while offering to be your slave forever as long as you stay chained to your keybord" really) like a sequel to that, seeing as you got me so hooked on the pairing.
Oh, and I wondered: How old is Gohan anyway? I guessed around ten or eleven... Is that right?
Hm, what else to say... Ah, in the end you could have drawn out the scene where they have actual intercourse a bit more. Although it was nice it would have been even nicer if Goku had taken Gohan from behind or something, and if Gohan's description of what he feels had been a bit longer.
Mh, so now I'm dying to know what will happen in the future. Is Gohan going to fall in love with Goku? Or isn't he already? xD And what about Goku? He's not going to try and find someone else to satisfy his cravings, is he? And it'd be interesting to see how this'd change Gohan XD *tries to imagine a normal breakfast scene and ends up with Gohan seducing Goku into taking him on the table* *cough* Uh, well... *blush* XD
Anyway, I think you get my drift. I love this story. *grins brightly* (And I'm not afraid to admit it, you spineless people out there! *shakes her fist at the people who read stories like this but never comment*)
(Oh, and on a side note I also like "Three's company", but I was too lazy to comment, so it seems like I'm a hypocrite *drop*)
Ciao!
Shiruy
It's very reassuring to see that I'm not the only one who's fascinated with unprobable, hot, yaoi incest pairings. *grin*
I really, REALLY liked the way you wrote that blowjob xD Usually I hate those 'cause the one giving them doesn't get anything out of it, but in your story... xD Well, let's just say it was disturbingly cute and hotter than it had any right to be. Oh, and I laughed my ass off at Gohan's line XD "Mom did that too? I thought I made that up or something." Hilarious!
I also liked the fact that Goku had so many doubts and tried to get Gohan to go away and forget about everything. I don't like stories where a character that's usually so good and full of morals suddenly turns around and sleeps with his son, telling him that everything is alright and Daddy just wants to play or shit like that. You showed that he's deeply conflicted and not happy about what's happening.
I'd REALLY(as in "falling to my knees and begging you while offering to be your slave forever as long as you stay chained to your keybord" really) like a sequel to that, seeing as you got me so hooked on the pairing.
Oh, and I wondered: How old is Gohan anyway? I guessed around ten or eleven... Is that right?
Hm, what else to say... Ah, in the end you could have drawn out the scene where they have actual intercourse a bit more. Although it was nice it would have been even nicer if Goku had taken Gohan from behind or something, and if Gohan's description of what he feels had been a bit longer.
Mh, so now I'm dying to know what will happen in the future. Is Gohan going to fall in love with Goku? Or isn't he already? xD And what about Goku? He's not going to try and find someone else to satisfy his cravings, is he? And it'd be interesting to see how this'd change Gohan XD *tries to imagine a normal breakfast scene and ends up with Gohan seducing Goku into taking him on the table* *cough* Uh, well... *blush* XD
Anyway, I think you get my drift. I love this story. *grins brightly* (And I'm not afraid to admit it, you spineless people out there! *shakes her fist at the people who read stories like this but never comment*)
(Oh, and on a side note I also like "Three's company", but I was too lazy to comment, so it seems like I'm a hypocrite *drop*)
Ciao!
Shiruy
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March 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
And it just occured to me! Can you please, PLEASE write a Vegeta/FutureTrunks story? After all, they do spent an awful lot of time training together for Cell XD *snicker* And Trunks with his girly long hair is just plain hot x3
Shi
Shi
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November 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Aww yes finally
i completely agree with goku SO fucking hot
thank you i finally came to this story i'm sure you know how hard that can be sometimes
you are an excellent writer smut or no smut aside
thanks for a great story
*sigh* why are the incest ones always the hotter ones* shakes head at the wrongness* lol
i completely agree with goku SO fucking hot
thank you i finally came to this story i'm sure you know how hard that can be sometimes
you are an excellent writer smut or no smut aside
thanks for a great story
*sigh* why are the incest ones always the hotter ones* shakes head at the wrongness* lol
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September 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow that was so hot... one of the hottest things I ever read! I like the fact that it was one-shot but I'd love to see a sequel or a similar story, cause you write this couple beautifully! And I don't care if it's taboo, it's just fanfiction and they're fictional characters doing fictional smut, which by the way you describe amazingly! Not overly done but not disgustingly graphic either, just the exact amount of both. Please write more!