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August 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
YESH!!!!!!!! MY FAVORITE CUPPLE now i don't like that you said goku is gonna hate you even more and i worry but gosh why stay with chichi................ruiner ofthe story lol but thanks for posting my fav couple!!!!!!!!!!
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July 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I like to remain anonomous (sp?) however I would like to tell you three things:
1) You have one hell of a perverted mind (as apparently do I, I read it anyway!) XD
2) Avoid roasted cabbage and don't eat Earwax!
3) great story, sequal please! XD (scared ya didn't i?)
1) You have one hell of a perverted mind (as apparently do I, I read it anyway!) XD
2) Avoid roasted cabbage and don't eat Earwax!
3) great story, sequal please! XD (scared ya didn't i?)
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July 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
sequal!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!..meh to lazy to sign in
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May 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
more please^_^
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March 31, 2007 at 12:00 AM
great story. would love more.
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March 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Damn, I knew Mediaminer were been some bastards, but they did ban my reviewers! I sent them many emails and pleaded with them, but to no avail, they did not respond. Damn, but I hope you don't hate me, because I didn't think putting that fic on that site was bad, because there were so many others like it. I've certainly seen worse. You aren't the only one of my reviewers that has this problem, but the only way to get around it is, either change your username, or use a public pc. Otherwise, you can forget about that site. I was pissed, but I don't go there anymore either, they banned me obviously. Sorry again.
Now about this fic.... It pleases me to know that you liked this pairing enough to use it in one of your fics. But....you must get the POV and the tenses and the character focus right. There is no 'he' and 'I' in referrence to the same person. That and if this is in Gohan's POV, then he would refer to Goku as "Dad" or 'my father", or "he" something like that to make it more realistic to the reader. Also, the spelling errors. We all make them, but if you make just a little bit, it isn't a problem, however, in this fic, it is. It's so confusing, I find myself not wanting to really read it. But, I will, because you deserve a chance. I know you have potential, just get a beta reader (I'll do it for you and be very careful if you'll let me) and fix some things, and you're good to go.
PLEASE LET ME BETA FOR YOU!!! SEND ME THE FILE AND I WILL FIX IT. OH, AND I HAVE PLENTY MORE INCESTUOUS GOODNESS COMING UP, YOU'LL JUST HAVE TO BE PATIENT. ;)
Now about this fic.... It pleases me to know that you liked this pairing enough to use it in one of your fics. But....you must get the POV and the tenses and the character focus right. There is no 'he' and 'I' in referrence to the same person. That and if this is in Gohan's POV, then he would refer to Goku as "Dad" or 'my father", or "he" something like that to make it more realistic to the reader. Also, the spelling errors. We all make them, but if you make just a little bit, it isn't a problem, however, in this fic, it is. It's so confusing, I find myself not wanting to really read it. But, I will, because you deserve a chance. I know you have potential, just get a beta reader (I'll do it for you and be very careful if you'll let me) and fix some things, and you're good to go.
PLEASE LET ME BETA FOR YOU!!! SEND ME THE FILE AND I WILL FIX IT. OH, AND I HAVE PLENTY MORE INCESTUOUS GOODNESS COMING UP, YOU'LL JUST HAVE TO BE PATIENT. ;)
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March 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
squeal please