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chapter 2: again, this whole thing is a diamond in the rough. the thoughts/counter-thoughts/dialogue run together uncomfortably. grammar mistakes a plenty. but there's something here that's incredibly engaging, very fulfilling to read. the characterizations are a little over-dramatic sometimes, but other times they fit perfectly (Duo with the knife leaning over Wufei, then when he's shocked that Wufei is concerned about him, not himself). really, i'm so torn with this whole thing. it's like i love it in its essence, but i want you to tear it to pieces and start from scratch because i know you can do better. still, i'll keep reading. i'm enjoying it, that's for sure.

chapter 1: it's a little too... fast paced? bit too much 'stream of consciousness'. i feel like i can't stay with the train of thought all the time. i do like the premise, even amidst the '5 g-boys in a safehouse' standard backdrop. you do some really good things with description. i'll keep reading, bit by bit. i did enjoy the first chapter, that's for sure.

Echo! You're back! Hooray! ^_^

Sadly, it's getting late. I'll try reading and reviewing this sometime soon.

I think this is one of my new favorite stories. I love all the complex emotions between each of the pilots. And can I just say the Trowa/Quatre/Heero threesome is hot? The scene in the back of the cop car made me shiver in a nice way.

A few chapters ago when Heero and Trowa were just gently stroking Duo's scars was unnerving. It was such a beautiful image at first, until all of the sudden Duo reacted so violently to it, when you suddenly realized this was a guy who couldn't tolerate that, where even that gentle affection, physically, felt like a violation. If the circumstances had been different, if he hadn't been traumatized, that scene would have been really, really sensuous. But it was still intimate, just hearing him explain where each scar came from, and seeing them be so concerned about him.

This story is gorgeously done. More, please.

This story is really great. I really like it! I'm a huge Wufei fan. I really hope that you continu it.

P.S. I also really liked the part in the cop car. ^_~

*happy sigh* This story really is lovely. I think your damaged!Duo is fantastic. Very well done!

HALLO! It is I, Jen of the Chibi-Pa/Megacon. The new chapter is 100% lovely. I can't wait for some action :rubs hands: But this is also angsty. Angsty has to work up to it, I know, I know. XD
Hope you update again sooooon!

wow you updated I love this chapter please keep it coming.

Yay! Another chapter! Lovely, lovely story. Raw and harsh with a bit of romance. Just the way I like it. Long live the 2x5!

Is there more to come? This is such delicious fiction. I loved this latest chapter with those nice policemen and all those weapons. Please update soon.